Narrating to not narrating

[ulillillia]

One final question. If a character is narrating and that same character speaks normally as if not narrating without any actions, is it okay to have something like this:


KNUCKLES (V.O.)
Hi. I'm Knuckles. This was the story
of my life time and I'll never forget
it. It all started....
.
KNUCKLES
About 15 miles to go and I'll be there.
Maybe I should make someone become
supernatural.


Is this right? It just seems odd. The first bunch, Knuckles is narrating. The second bunch is where he's not narrating.

[Keith Kocaine]

Here's how I would handle it:

KNUCKLES (V.O.)
Hi. I'm Knuckles. This was the story
of my life time and I'll never forget
it. It all started....

Knuckles begins to jog.
.
KNUCKLES
About 15 miles to go and I'll be there.
Maybe I should make someone become
supernatural.

[nickj]

Yep, I always find an action to insert between the two dialogue blocks. Something has to be happening on screen during the V.O. anyway -- just tell us what's going on.

[ulillillia]

At this part of the story, Knuckles is gliding 800 mph 800 feet above everything. Nothing can happen when he glides, except that he constantly goes down, but he's already going down by default. I could make it so that he looks, say, 90 degrees to the left at the scenery whizzing by like it wasn't there.

[nickj]

Who's Knuckles talking to? I can't think of a scene where a characters alone, talking, AND doing a voice-over.

[ulillillia]

The voice-over thing is for narration. Knuckles narrates and he speaks aloud to himself while he whizzes by trying to get to the location he's after. Know what I mean? Or what, do I do something like this:

Knuckles
(narrating)
This story was the story of my life time! [and so on]
(not narrating)
I should be getting close by now. [rest of dialogue]