Overlap scenes?

[Roscoe P]

I have two characters in two locations, but I want to match the dialogue in the transition. I've got a bad thing happening to Mickey in one location:

MICKEY
Aw --

And elsewhere I've got Travis yelling goodbye to someone in a booth.

TRAVIS
Chuck!

So it looks like:

MICKEY
Aw --

PASSENGER DOCK

TRAVIS
Chuck!

But having the PASSENGER DOCK in between is just enough to throw off the flow of the desired "Aw Chuck" which of couse means "Aw Fu-k"

So is there a way to write that without the location change in between, but we still know we're switching locations?

Thanks,
Roscoe

[zemiller]

Write it as you've written it. You can't not have a slugline.

But does aw chuck really mean aw fvck?

I don't hear it that way, it's a little weak if you ask me.

[Deus Ex Machine]

It's not an overlap as much as a cut to:

INT. FUDGE SHOP - DAY

.........WOMAN
...I'd like a big co--

....................................CUT TO:

INT. CLOCK STORE - DAY

.........MAN
...--ock. I'm looking for a clock.

CUT TO is optional.

[Roscoe P]

Actually I wasn't meaning to put it out there for a weak/not weak vote. In the context of the entire scene, the meaning is obvious.

But Dues, thanks for the suggestion of Cut to. I use virtually no direction, so that one probably won't hurt...and get the point across.

I was just hoping there was a clever way to put the Travis line above the slug in a way we know it is from the next location under the slug. Oh well.

Thanks,
RoscoeP

[Salazkin]

If each scene location were to have already been established before the part where Mickey says "Aw--", you could use INTERCUT just before where Mickey says "Aw--". Some may consider it unwieldy, but it would provide the continuity you want without any break between the "Aw" and the "Chuck", yet it would be clear that they're in different locations.