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Vertigo4KimNovak
03-11-2004, 10:45 PM
Hi guys I wonder how to write this kind of scene. I have one character surrounded by 10 or more people who scream and repeat the same word to him. Something like "GO" or "KILL" hope u see what I mean.
How will you write it ?
What do u think of this ? Is it correct ?

PEOPLE
(repeating)
kill,kill,kill

Cyfress
03-11-2004, 11:49 PM
You mean you want the scene to capture the mood. Not have it come off corney. You want it to be scary, yet mysterious, a la Eyes Wide Shut kinda stuff.

There is no 'way' to write it. What are you seeing?

Vertigo4KimNovak
03-12-2004, 12:06 AM
Cyphress I want to write simply what the guys are saying but they are numerous and say the same stuff like in The Pirates of the Cara.. The coin scene with the blood the other pirates are shouting the same xxxx How do you write it ??

Cyfress
03-12-2004, 01:30 AM
What do you see?

Int. Garage

Ten Guys circle whoever.

GUYS
(chanting)
Kill...kill...kill...kill...

That's how I see it, how do you see it?

Vertigo4KimNovak
03-12-2004, 01:54 AM
I agree.It's what I was thinking. Thanks for your help

DZ440
03-19-2004, 02:06 AM
INT. SOMEPLACE - SOME TIME

Ten ZOMBIE MEN come into frame and encircle hero. Hero quickly looks around.

* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * ZOMBIE MEN
* * * * * * * * * * * * (eerily chanting)
* * * * * * * * * * * * Kill…kill…kill…kill…

Hope this helps.
Edited for a minor change in format.

MrErdnase
04-04-2004, 07:43 AM
Or, an even other way to write that is:

PEOPLE
(chanting eerily in unison)
KILL, KILL, Kill!!!!!!!!!

Then Protag starts to sweat on his forehead, the chanting becomes louder, louder, until it gets to the point where it almost defeans him........

oops I think I went too far... but seriously, it might be good to punctuate the tension of that scene by adding more to the narrative and by letting the character REACT to that.

and remember, SHOW DON'T TELL. ;)