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whitingmedia
03-19-2004, 06:32 AM
I am just starting a story where my 3 main characters are a husband, his wife and her mother.

The story is about a guy upsetting his Mother-in-law who get revenge.

When I first introduce the characters in the story, what is the best way to clearly explain their relationship?

I have tried it many different ways and nothing seems right.
especially the husband. If I introduce him as the Son-in-law of XXXXX (mother-in-law) it seems to reduce the role of his wife who is still a primary character. If I introduce him as the husband of YYYYYY (wife) it seems to reduce the Mothers role.

Maybe I am making too much of this? Confused.

altoption
03-19-2004, 08:07 AM
Here's one way to handle it:

INT. LADIES ROOM - DAY

BOB and SHEILA in a stall. He's in a tux. She's in a wedding dress, which he's doing his darndest to get her out of.

SHEILA

Bob. Not here.

BOB

But Sheila, baby. We're married now.

SHEILA

Yeah. I know. It's just my --

Just then, the stall door flings open revealing MRS. BARAZANI, Sheila's mom, three hundred pounds of mother-in-law from hell.

SHEILA

Mother.

MRS. KRUPSHACK

Bob. Put your pud in your pants. What kind of piss ass excuse for a son-in-law are you?


Best,
altop

pantalone
03-19-2004, 08:48 AM
You don't really need to tell me that the couple is married in the description, it should be obvious from the story. Ditto the mother-in-law and father-in-law. I remember my in-laws (pause to shudder). My wife called them Mom and Dad. I called them Mrs. Gargoyle and Bob. When I wanted to get under the mother's skin, I'd call her mom. It made her teeth grind.

RatWriter
03-19-2004, 09:51 AM
Son-in-Law
It's good to see you Mom.

Mother-in-Law
I swear, if you call me Mom
one more time I'm going to
blow your brains out.

She pulls a 44 magnum out of her purse.

Daughter
Don't let him get to you, Mom.
Go ahead, shoot him if you want.