BlueParrot
06-06-2001, 10:06 AM
These are excerpts from the first few pages of Matt Damon and Ben Affleck's script. According to the site, it is what Matt Damon and Ben Affleck originally wrote on paper before the movie was made.
I am confused. I would love to write descriptions like this but I've been told that it's a major no-no. Again, these examples are from just first four pages.
MY QUESTION IS: What's acceptable and what's not? There seems to be a bit of editorialization in this award-winning screenplay.
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INT. L STREET BAR & GRILLE, SOUTH BOSTON -- EVENING
The bar is dirty, more than a little run down. If there is
ever a cook on duty, he's not here now. As we pan across
several empty tables, we can almost smell the odor of last
nights beer and crushed pretzels on the floor.
***
The guy holding court is CHUCKIE SULLIVAN, 20, and the largest
of the bunch. He is loud, boisterous, a born entertainer.
Next to him is WILL HUNTING, 20, handsome and confident, a
soft-spoken leader. On Will's right sits BILLY MCBRIDE, 22,
heavy, quiet, someone you definitely wouldn't want to tangle
with. Finally there is MORGAN O'MALLY, 19, smaller than the
other guys. Wiry and anxious, Morgan listens to Chuckie's
horror stories with eager disgust.
All four boys speak with thick Boston accents. This is a rough,
working class Irish neighborhood and these boys are its product.
***
EXT. SOUTH BOSTON ROOFTOP -- EARLY AFTERNOON
SEAN McGUIRE (52) sits, FORMALLY DRESSED, on the roof of his
apartment building in a beat-up lawn chair. Well-built and
fairly muscular, he stares blankly out over the city.
On his lap rests an open invitation that reads "M.I.T. CLASS
OF '67 REUNION."
While the morning is quiet and Sean sits serenely, there is a
look about his that tells us he has faced hard times. This is
a man who fought his way through life. On his lonely stare we:
***
This is from the first four pages of the original script. Can anybody let me know if what was done above is okay or not?
I am confused. I would love to write descriptions like this but I've been told that it's a major no-no. Again, these examples are from just first four pages.
MY QUESTION IS: What's acceptable and what's not? There seems to be a bit of editorialization in this award-winning screenplay.
***
INT. L STREET BAR & GRILLE, SOUTH BOSTON -- EVENING
The bar is dirty, more than a little run down. If there is
ever a cook on duty, he's not here now. As we pan across
several empty tables, we can almost smell the odor of last
nights beer and crushed pretzels on the floor.
***
The guy holding court is CHUCKIE SULLIVAN, 20, and the largest
of the bunch. He is loud, boisterous, a born entertainer.
Next to him is WILL HUNTING, 20, handsome and confident, a
soft-spoken leader. On Will's right sits BILLY MCBRIDE, 22,
heavy, quiet, someone you definitely wouldn't want to tangle
with. Finally there is MORGAN O'MALLY, 19, smaller than the
other guys. Wiry and anxious, Morgan listens to Chuckie's
horror stories with eager disgust.
All four boys speak with thick Boston accents. This is a rough,
working class Irish neighborhood and these boys are its product.
***
EXT. SOUTH BOSTON ROOFTOP -- EARLY AFTERNOON
SEAN McGUIRE (52) sits, FORMALLY DRESSED, on the roof of his
apartment building in a beat-up lawn chair. Well-built and
fairly muscular, he stares blankly out over the city.
On his lap rests an open invitation that reads "M.I.T. CLASS
OF '67 REUNION."
While the morning is quiet and Sean sits serenely, there is a
look about his that tells us he has faced hard times. This is
a man who fought his way through life. On his lonely stare we:
***
This is from the first four pages of the original script. Can anybody let me know if what was done above is okay or not?