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WritePro
03-16-2004, 10:29 AM
EXT. A SMALL BEACH COVE - DAY

A twisted tree. Its branches, a black mass of what appears
fluttering leaves.

Suddenly, the leaves take flight as a flock of crows
breakneck off its thin branches.

The tree, left a skeleton of dried wood, stands a scarecrow
to the wind as the crows gather in the sky.

Their black mass swoops away. A triangle headed toward the
sea.

The lead bird notices something on the ground.

A rodent in Bunny ears. Pulling a wagon filled to overflow,
covered with a tarpaulin. What looks like egg shapes,
underneath.

The swarm of birds swoops down for closer inspection and as
they land near the struggling rodent,

They gather together circling it, mumbling about the sight,
and Gunther, the biggest and lead crow, steps up and over to
the little rat.

He puffs out his bird chest.

GUNTHER
Got quite a little carriage there,
don't cha?

EMIL
I got a job.

He struggles with the harness straps over his shoulder to
continue pulling the wagon.

GUNTHER
And that stench. Boy, you fouling
up everything.

The other crows crowd closer around the wagon. Poke and pick
at its contents.

A skinny crow with glasses. Plaid vest.

CHESTER
They're eggs! Rotten eggs!

Mumbling among the crows.

GUNTHER
What cha doin' with rotten eggs
boy?

EMIL
It's my job.

GUNTHER
You said that. So what's this job.
Damn, that smells!

All the crows hold their beaks.

ALL THE CROWS
Whew. What an odor.

CLAUDINE, a proud bird in a flowered hat. Daisy sticking up
from the top, steps up. Points a feather finger at Emil.

CLAUDINE
Boy, why you always doing stupid
stuff. When the drought came, you
sold peanuts. When the rain came
back, you sold spring water. What's
up with you rodent?

EMIL
I'm and entrepeenuer. And this is
for a friend.

A monocled crow, CHESTER. Holds the stem of his eyepiece.

CHESTER
It would appear the young rodent's
got ambition. Misplaced, but the
same.

GUNTHER
The boy is carrying garbage. What
ambition is that? He's a junk rat.

EMIL
I am not a junk rat! I got a job!

CLAUDINE
Boy that's garbage!

EMIL
But it's to keep the good stuff
coming.

He tugs at his harness and starts off.

EMIL
And he'll be mad if I don't hurry!

The crows follow as he drudges along. His covered load
wobbling as he trudges with the load.

Chester peeks under the tarp again.

CHESTER
And what's with the ears rodent?
Who you doing this for?

Starts pecking at the eggs.

CHESTER
Hmm! Tangy!

EMIL
Stop that! These are for the
Weasel.

GUNTHER
What's the weasel got to do with
this?

EMIL
He helps. He got a job too. He's
the delivery guy.

The crows crowd closer to the wagon and all start pecking at
the tarp and trying to rip it off to eat the rotten eggs.

GUNTHER
Boy, I think the dinner bell has
rung. Weasel's out.

Suddenly the Weasle darts out of the bushes and scatters the
crows. They fly off in a rush.

Chester carries a stolen egg.

Weasle takes a sling-shot from his hind hindquarters and
shoot the crow. It drops the egg.

SAMMY
That'll teach 'em!

EMIL
Glad to see ya Sammy. Bunny's in a
hurry.

Sammy gets behind the wagon and starts pushing.

SAMMY
Then we better hurry. I'm hungry
and this thing needs to filled with
the good ones.

They approach a tree stump.

SAMMY
Right here.

He digs around the stump and a finds a hole.

SAMMY
Dump 'em in here. My private spot.

Emil drags the wagon over and tips it up to let the eggs roll
down the hole. Sammy sits watching, sucking on an egg.

EMIL
Sammy!

Sammy, a satisfied smile. His ears perk up. Sucks down the
last of the egg.

SAMMY
Yeah, yeah.

He goes to help hold the wagon as the eggs finish rolling
into the hole. As the last falls in he covered the hole with
his hind legs pushing dirt over them.

EMIL
Done! Now let's get the wagon to
the bunny.

A LOUD TWIG SNAP. Footsteps trudging through brush.

SAMMY
Oh no!

EMIL
Humans!

They scatter into the brush to hide.

A HAND REACHES DOWN.

A little girl, JENNIFER (6) picks up the empty wagon.

JENNIFER
Oh look mommie! A widdle wagon!

The little girl holds the wagon to her chest. Lovingly.

A lovely woman in flowing dress reach down to pat her child's
head.

MOMMIE
Yes dear. It's pretty. I know. You
can put your Easter Eggs in it.

JENNIFER
Oh good!

Mommie places her arm around the child as they continue
through the woods.

JENNIFER
Mommie? How does the Easter Bunny
know where to put the eggs when we
look for them?

MOMMIE
He probably has helpers dear. So
he knows where the little children
live and go to church.

JENNIFER
Last year, I only found two. And
teacher said a lot were never
found.

MOMMIE
Yes. Sometimes they don't find them
all. But I bet the Bunny has
someone to gather those too, so you
little people don't find any rotten
ones.

JENNIFER
Hmm. That sounds smart mommie. I
wonder who he gets.

MOMMIE
I don't know dear. Come on. Let go
decorate your wagon.

JENNIFER
I hope it's not the crows. They'd
wouldn't be any help. They're not
nice.

MOMMIE
Yes dear...

Jennifer laughs - shrugs off her mother's arm and darts off
with her precious new wagon.

sarajb
03-16-2004, 09:23 PM
I was weirded out by the creepy crow tree thing and had to read the first few descriptions a couple of times to get the picture, but once the story started rolling – I really like it!

A quirky little inventive tale, WritePro.

kcshc
03-16-2004, 11:27 PM
WritePro - since you've edited it once already (pls refer to Submission Rules 8o ), you might want to take the opportunity to be hanged for a sheep as a lamb, and do a bit more editing...or even, a lot more editing. That is not intended as a snide remark: there are a number of 'silly' errors that spoil an interesting, if somewhat hard-to-fathom read.

If you do decide to go for the sheep, you might even consider to tighten it up a lot further. So, sharpen your pencil, and your wits, and get cracking on dem rotten eggs! :D

Just my USD0.02

Good luck! :)

WritePro
03-17-2004, 08:08 AM
kcshc, don't know what you mean by your analogy, but I didn't edit it - only the title to reflect that it was an entry, and a name of a character that was in the wrong place..

I read the rules.

what the heck it this hanging sheep?

wenonah
03-17-2004, 08:09 AM
Write pro: I think she's referring to this -

Entry Rules:
1. One entry per person, each entry to be marked "Easter '04".
2. Once an entry is posted, just leave it be...no tinkering, etc., as this should all be done before you post it! Though this rule is not written in stone, please (be disciplined enough to) try to adhere to it.
3. Deadline for posting entries: Friday, 26 March 2004.

And encouraging you to BREAK the rules a bit more.

I have a question - the "rodent in bunny ears" is that really a rabbit or a rat? If it's a rat - why is he posing as a rabbit? It just threw me off because I couldn't really decide.

wenonah

Hairy Lime
03-17-2004, 10:00 AM
I have a question - the "rodent in bunny ears" is that really a rabbit or a rat? This can't be your only question.

WritePro
03-17-2004, 11:27 AM
It's a rat, but he's wearing the ears because it's his job to gather the old eggs and he's imitating the bunny.

How would you feel, knowing a rat was carrying aound your children's eggs? :eek

:lol

I wish I could changes some things. But as per instructions (as with any contest), I can't (being fair), so I'm stuck with what's there...

but I think it's cute as is, anyway.

wenonah
03-17-2004, 12:57 PM
Oh, I'm not contesting its cuteness...I'm all for cuteness. I guess I was confused why one helper would wear the ears but the other one (the weasel was it?) did not - you know, like Santa has all the elves as helpers and they have a strict uniform - so shouldn't all of the Easter Bunny's helpers also have to follow some sort of dress code? :p - Course, we just hide plastic eggs around here to avoid rabbit-eared rats from scampering through our yard spreading god knows what to my children! :rollin - and hey, if they miss some from last year, less work for me this year!

thanks wp.

wenonah

kcshc
03-17-2004, 08:52 PM
WritePro wrote...
kcshc, don't know what you mean by your analogy, but I didn't edit it - only the title to reflect that it was an entry, and a name of a character that was in the wrong place..

Erm, so you did, in fact, edit it. No worries, dude. :D

what the heck it this hanging sheep?

(You may) As well as (be) hanged for a sheep as a lamb simply means not to adopt a half-measure (in a particular course of action). Often reflected in criminal thought processes, e.g., why steal a lamb when you could steal a sheep...as the penalty for doing so is the same.

I wish I could changes some things. But as per instructions (as with any contest), I can't (being fair), so I'm stuck with what's there...

Don't worry, as Wenonah wrote...
Write pro: I think she's referring to this -
2. Once an entry is posted, just leave it be...no tinkering, etc., as this should all be done before you post it! Though this rule is not written in stone, please (be disciplined enough to) try to adhere to it.

And...
And (he, i.e., me (who is definitely not a 'she',) is) encouraging you to BREAK the rules a bit more.

So, there you have it. Now, get cracking on dem rotten eggs...but only if you really want to! :D

Good luck! :)

wenonah
03-18-2004, 07:35 AM
LOL, :o Sorry! I guess I figured you were too friendly to be a guy ;) I'd like to give everyone the benefit of the doubt on the board and call them "she's" - if I don't know for sure. (makes me feel like there may be more female screenwriters than there probably are)

And those magpie/crow's just look so CUTE (of course with a monocle and a tartan vest, they would be adorable)

carry on!

wenonah