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You have a serious story flaw. Beer expires after about a year refrigerated. In a beer truck that's lost power and has been abandoned for 20 years? It would taste like bacterial discharge from a Gonorrhea patient.I'm never wrong. Reality is just stubborn.
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Originally posted by FoxHound View PostYou have a serious story flaw. Beer expires after about a year refrigerated. In a beer truck that's lost power and has been abandoned for 20 years? It would taste like bacterial discharge from a Gonorrhea patient.
And you know what that tastes like, because..........?
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Expiration dates don't apply in this type of comedy. The beer could have been freeze dried and all you need is to add water? Or the cans are in a stasis container. or the truck is in an underground frozen chamber buried deep within the earth where it's so cold items are preserved like in the arctic. There's a a slew of methods to by pass such story issues. --RichsigpicWriting is re-writing
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Originally posted by Script Curmudgeon View PostI am looking for a writer that can reinvent a completed high-concept comedy. The script has received a ton of read requests based on the concept but it turns out there are two problems with it: (1) it's not that funny, and, (2) there are some story elements that need to be changed or eliminated.
I need someone with several strong, intelligent comedies under their belt that could do the rewrite as either a co-writer with equal share or I can pay a flat ghostwriting fee. We would work out all details on pay or credit before getting started.
Take a look at the logline and if it is something you would like to discuss further please send me your contact info via PM.
Title: The Beer Hunter
Logline: Twenty years after the apocalypse, in a world where there is no beer and the ingredients can no longer be grown, one man searches the wasteland for the legend of a lost beer truck.
It is currently more of a satire and not enough of a comedy. It is along the lines of "Raising Arizona" or early Woody Allen (but it doesn't need to stay that way). There are no zombies (and it does need to stay that way).
Best,
TimSL35
Potent dreamer. Newb disclaimer.
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Originally posted by FoxHound View PostYou have a serious story flaw. Beer expires after about a year refrigerated. In a beer truck that's lost power and has been abandoned for 20 years? It would taste like bacterial discharge from a Gonorrhea patient.
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Originally posted by Richmond Weems View PostThat's not a flaw, that's an opportunity to explain why it hasn't gone skunky in a way that an audience buys it."Friends make the worst enemies." Frank Underwood
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