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Forum: Screenwriting 07-04-2019, 01:25 PM
Replies: 57
Views: 1,732
Posted By jonpiper
Re: How Tone and Voice = Writer's Style (attitude and personality)

Julysses, Your two examples tell us and the actor two different ways for the actor to behave in a situation. How do your examples pertain to tone and voice in the narrative of a screenplay?

Why...
Forum: Screenwriting 07-02-2019, 12:06 AM
Replies: 57
Views: 1,732
Posted By jonpiper
Re: How Tone and Voice = Writer's Style (attitude and personality)

Isn't it obvious that changes in word choice and sentence structure in the Balls Out action/description lines would change the tone and voice of the piece.

You could change words while keeping every...
Forum: Screenwriting 05-23-2019, 10:51 AM
Replies: 97
Views: 3,723
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Log The Line... LOGLINES

Joe, you said, “With a logline having at least the three basic elements, I believe an industry person would have no other reason but the concept itself not interesting them, rather than an incomplete...
Forum: Screenwriting 05-18-2019, 10:45 AM
Replies: 97
Views: 3,723
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Log The Line... LOGLINES

Okay. Sorry, I misspoke the truth, dpat. :shifty: A good 50 words max. in 1 or 2 sentences is better than a forced one sentence 25 word logline.
Forum: Screenwriting 05-17-2019, 06:49 PM
Replies: 97
Views: 3,723
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Log The Line... LOGLINES

Piper: Order. Order. Order on the board.

DD: You’re not the moderator. You lack the authority to call the board to order.

Piper: Then I will get on with it and speak the truth.

In...
Forum: Screenwriting 05-11-2019, 04:47 AM
Replies: 97
Views: 3,723
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Log The Line... LOGLINES

Good point, Joe. Hey, isn’t that the only reason to write a logline for a finished screenplay? Isn't a logline a tool used to convince somebody who can do something with our pages to read them?
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Forum: Screenwriting 05-10-2019, 11:49 AM
Replies: 97
Views: 3,723
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Log The Line... LOGLINES

The idea that a logline should also be used to guide you as you write a screenplay came from Larry Logmire.

Only kidding.

But a logline at the start works for some writers.

Say you have a...
Forum: Screenwriting 05-09-2019, 10:13 AM
Replies: 97
Views: 3,723
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Log The Line... LOGLINES

LOL. No goal. No stakes. No antagonist. Where is the story?:confused: :)

When a depressed writer with writers block stops creating everything but internet porn, he must elude a deadly moral bureau...
Forum: Films 12-28-2018, 11:10 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,318
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Vice

Good to hear it rang true for you, Joan. With that and TigerFang's comments, it's definitely on my must see list.
Forum: Films 12-17-2018, 10:38 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,318
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Vice

Politics aside, this does look like a film to see based on all the elements of filmmaking including acting, directing, and screenwriting.

But I wonder how much of it is factual and how much is...
Forum: Screenwriting 09-03-2018, 03:35 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 1,934
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Breaking up a long scene

Also checkout the Inglorious Basterds script. https://www.scribd.com/doc/25017184/Inglourious-Basterds-Original-Screenplay The opening scene in the farmhouse goes on for 10 pages, is then broken...
Forum: Screenwriting 08-12-2018, 12:03 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 2,289
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Voice-Over

Go for it. It's your story and you must choose how to tell it. Being careful of the details doesn't mean you can't be creative.
Forum: Screenwriting 08-11-2018, 07:30 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 2,289
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Voice-Over

Really?

What I mean is the voice of someone who is not in the story. Peter Falk tells the story of Princess Bride. He' telling or reading the story to his grandchild.


The narrator in Little...
Forum: Screenwriting 08-10-2018, 05:53 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 2,289
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Voice-Over

The scene itself makes sense, but how could Salieri narrate it if he wasn't there to see and hear what happened between Mozart and his wife?


Are you sure Salieri narrated that scene? I didn't...
Forum: Screenwriting 08-10-2018, 11:19 AM
Replies: 18
Views: 2,289
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Voice-Over

It doesn't make sense that Salieri could narrate a scene that he wasn't in, unless he somehow knew what occurred in the scene.


If Salieri did narrate a scene he wasn't in between Amadeus and...
Forum: Screenwriting 07-06-2018, 10:18 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 3,190
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Truncated, incomplete sentences. Bad grammar or good staccato?

Here's a take with a few details.

INT. STRIP JOINT - NIGHT

The air pulsates in time with an ear-splitting rendition of [appropriate rock music that sets the mood]

AT THE CROWDED BAR Roger downs...
Forum: Basics 06-27-2018, 06:29 PM
Replies: 148
Views: 20,655
Posted By jonpiper
Re: How important is voice in screenwriting?

Joan, Centos, and Jeff, thanks for your answers.

I don't mean to be obnoxious, but I wonder if Jeff, or anyone, could elaborate on why voice is as important as story if your goal is to be hired as...
Forum: Basics 06-22-2018, 09:36 AM
Replies: 148
Views: 20,655
Posted By jonpiper
Re: How important is voice in screenwriting?

That leads to another question, which I don't think has been answered.

In a screenplay, is the voice of the writer, as the OP has described voice, as important as the story?
Forum: Basics 06-14-2018, 08:56 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 3,815
Posted By jonpiper
Re: How important is writing to screenwriting?

Subsequent parties, like directors, actors, set designers, etc. are not merely executives; they are givers of life.

Without them even the best screemplays would be nothing more than a barely read...
Forum: Basics 06-13-2018, 03:15 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 3,815
Posted By jonpiper
Forum: Basics 06-13-2018, 03:05 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 3,815
Posted By jonpiper
Re: How important is writing to screenwriting?

Methinks you are overrating the importance of writing to moviemaking.
Forum: Basics 06-11-2018, 05:15 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 3,815
Posted By jonpiper
Re: How important is writing to screenwriting?

Yes, how important is writing to moviemaking?
Forum: Screenwriting 06-05-2018, 04:13 PM
Replies: 19
Views: 2,855
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Is it acceptable...

Yes, maybe too many unnecessary details. Rather than describing all the physical details, try comparing the loacation to places that are familiar and create similar feeling.
Forum: Screenwriting 06-01-2018, 01:40 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,984
Posted By jonpiper
Re: Is revenge only for anti-heroes?

An anti-hero is a protagonist who lacks heroic qualities. A revenge seeker can be a heroic protagonist or an anti-hero depending on the story. A revenge seeker is not an anti-hero by default.

For...
Forum: Basics 05-29-2018, 05:39 PM
Replies: 148
Views: 20,655
Posted By jonpiper
Thumbs up Re: How important is voice in screenwriting?

Your voice is clear and strong.
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