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Forum: Basics 10-01-2018, 01:59 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 3,557
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: The Opening - Problem vs. Opportunity

Maybe a better description instead of "problem" would be "inciting event" and it could be a simple thing like the protagonist making a decision or being acted upon in some way, even if in a positive...
Forum: Screenwriting 08-29-2018, 03:31 PM
Replies: 20
Views: 2,673
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: I have no voice

Good trailer. Well done for your accomplishment.

Maybe he meant a "hallmark" of your film (but that doesn't usually happen until you have multiple films) like a Car Chase is analogous with Michael...
Forum: Screenwriting 08-19-2018, 09:52 PM
Replies: 134
Views: 17,600
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Things I see over and over in amateur writing...

INT. BEDROOM - MORNING

BEEP! BEEP! BEEP!

An alarm clock on the nightstand flashes 6:00am.

A groggy HERO (pick anyone you like) MOANS, rolls over and fumbles trying to hit the button on the alarm...
Forum: Sites, Services, Software, & Supplies 08-16-2018, 12:14 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 955
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Screenplay Formatting Guide

Pretty good guide and easy to find stuff when you don't have your copy of "The Screenwriter's Bible" handy.

Thanks for posting it!
Forum: Writing Exercises 07-30-2018, 08:51 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 512
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Results - "Summer Camp" writing contest

Was a fun writing exercise. I appreciated the opportunity to enter.

My sentiments echo those above on the top three and they were my choices as well.

I smell a cage fight or the writer's equivalent...
Forum: Writing Exercises 07-16-2018, 09:07 PM
Replies: 55
Views: 5,689
Posted By UneducatedFan
Forum: Writing Exercises 07-16-2018, 02:27 PM
Replies: 55
Views: 5,689
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Summer Camp - deadline Friday 13 July

First one sent in (and then resent after I fixed a couple of errors).

Now for the second but someone told me a story about a girl who goes to an upscale family summer camp, learns to dance, falls in...
Forum: Writing Exercises 07-14-2018, 12:49 AM
Replies: 55
Views: 5,689
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Summer Camp - deadline Friday 13 July

Doh! I'm still working on it. Gonna miss the deadline.
Forum: Screenwriting 07-06-2018, 10:17 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 3,190
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Truncated, incomplete sentences. Bad grammar or good staccato?

I think it's fine but as an exercise in killing orphans and klingons...

INT. STRIP JOINT AND TAVERN – NIGHT
Ear-splitting rock music, indistinct conversation throb
around Roger. He drops on...
Forum: Screenwriting 06-29-2018, 12:13 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 3,190
Posted By UneducatedFan
Forum: Sites, Services, Software, & Supplies 06-29-2018, 09:17 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 2,229
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: My third Blacklist review...

Thanks for providing those. I was way off in my thought that the third was a skimmed review.

They were interesting to read and as I've never used Black List, I wasn't sure how detailed the notes...
Forum: Screenwriting 06-28-2018, 06:51 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 3,190
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Truncated, incomplete sentences. Bad grammar or good staccato?

I can only afford $9.95 anyways. :D

Seriously though, I really appreciate your outline thoughts. Besides the script I'm rewriting at the moment, I have another espionage thriller that I am...
Forum: Screenwriting 06-28-2018, 05:38 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 3,190
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Truncated, incomplete sentences. Bad grammar or good staccato?

And now I will start to notice it (and hopefully not repeat the mistake too often myself).

Thanks all!
Forum: Sites, Services, Software, & Supplies 06-28-2018, 03:53 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 2,229
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: My third Blacklist review...

I haven't used the Black List before and obviously don't have access to all your notes.

That said it almost looks like that third one "might" be a skimmed review. What I mean is they might have read...
Forum: Screenwriting 06-28-2018, 02:38 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 3,190
Posted By UneducatedFan
Forum: Screenwriting 06-28-2018, 12:34 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 3,190
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Truncated, incomplete sentences. Bad grammar or good staccato?

You captured exactly what I am attempting in my rewrite (with the hope to someday be adept enough to do it while writing the first draft). The current finished script was a whopping 140 pages when I...
Forum: Screenwriting 06-28-2018, 11:07 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 3,190
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Truncated, incomplete sentences. Bad grammar or good staccato?

That's exactly what I was looking for and it's even better. Thanks!
Forum: Screenwriting 06-28-2018, 09:50 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 3,190
Posted By UneducatedFan
Truncated, incomplete sentences. Bad grammar or good staccato?

In rewriting a feature script and in an effort to quicken the pace of the action lines, I've found myself writing condensed action items where in an attempt to remove "-ing" words or "-ed" words in...
Forum: Screenwriting 06-26-2018, 12:57 PM
Replies: 62
Views: 14,716
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Using BOLD in spec scripts

The James Cameron?

;)
Forum: Writing Exercises 06-25-2018, 03:23 PM
Replies: 55
Views: 5,689
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Summer Camp

I think you mean:

CAPS! WE DON'T HAVE ANY CAPS. WE DON'T NEED NO STINKING CAPS!

:D

(yeah, yeah. I know I'm not that clever.)
Forum: Writing Exercises 06-21-2018, 02:35 PM
Replies: 55
Views: 5,689
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Summer Camp

I'm in as well.
Forum: Business Questions and Advice 06-20-2018, 10:22 PM
Replies: 40
Views: 4,702
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Too many emails

I've had good experiences with the forum and it's proven to be a good resource for me. To those who have helped me, I appreciate it. To those who haven't yet, I look forward to that interaction. ;)...
Forum: Writing Exercises 06-19-2018, 05:32 PM
Replies: 55
Views: 5,689
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Summer Camp

That gives me an idea for a totally original story about a summer camp murderer...

He wears a...catcher's mask and his name is "Jayshun" (he's a millennial murderer) and he likes to cut people up...
Forum: Screenwriting 06-18-2018, 09:35 AM
Replies: 62
Views: 14,716
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Using BOLD in spec scripts

I started out not using bold at all. But have since switched to just using bold for scene headings. It's just my personal preference and I hope it isn't distracting. I usually use underlines in...
Forum: Writing Exercises 06-11-2018, 03:53 PM
Replies: 55
Views: 5,689
Posted By UneducatedFan
Re: Summer Camp

A summer camp set in the desert enslaves the delinquent kids who attend to digging holes all over the desert searching for buried treasure.

Don't think it's ever been done before...
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