So I've been reading through my script trying to spruce up action descriptions, and I noticed that i use the phrase, "He/She/ Character Name notices 'something". For instance:
Would it be acceptable to just write:
Is it implied by writing it that the character can see it?
Aidan stops for a moment to drink in the sunlight. He notices his skin has reddened with sunburn.
Aidan stops for a moment to drink in the sunlight. His skin has reddened with sunburn.
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