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    Points .................................................. ........................................

    Ghosts and Demons 2 2 2 1 total 7 StoryWriter

    Let Slip the Dogs of War 3 3 3 3 3 1 total 16 DangoForth

    Summer Daze 2 2 1 total 5 AnconRanger

    Killer Tower 1 1 total 2 14001

    Dogtown 3 2 total 5 dpaterso

    Jacob's Point 3 2 1 total 6 bioprofessor

    A Deep Sleep 1 1 total 2 jonpiper

    Dog Day of Summer 3 2 total 5 Centos



    A big applause for DangoForth not just for winning but also giving up the prize to the second place winner, StoryWriter.


    You guys did great and thanks for participating.

    Notes and comments can be posited on this thread.

    Again thanks.


    For posterity, here's the discussion thread, and here's the entries thread.
    Last edited by dpaterso; 09-18-2017, 11:45 PM. Reason: links added

  • #2
    Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

    huge congrats to dangoforth and to all who participated! and thanks to mark for running the contest and for his good humor.

    i voted for:
    1st place-Let Slip the Dogs of War (this one stood out, to me. the rest were SO close)
    2nd-Dogtown
    3rd-A Deep Sleep

    a last thought--i believe what made LET SLIP THE DOGS OF WAR stand out so much to me was the writing, subject matter, and the twist at the end also kind of reminded me of an old bluegrass song, BRINGING MARY HOME, about a man who sees a girl by the road at night, he picks her up in his car and she tells him where she lives, he takes her there but when he gets there she is not in his car. he goes to the door, knocks, her mother opens the door, he tries to explain what he cannot, and she tells him that 10 years ago her daughter got killed where he had first seen her. and every year, on that date, someone shows up at her door as they are trying to bring her daughter, mary, home. she is a ghost. always liked those kind of stories. good old song. i did not see the twist coming in the short script and it worked. good stuff!
    Last edited by AnconRanger; 09-15-2017, 07:38 PM.

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    • #3
      Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

      Congratulations to DangoForth. I was one who voted this number one. It really did stand out. I also voted for Ghosts and Demons as number two. And Killer Tower was my number three. I've got some notes and comments, but I want to "polish" them a little before posting – probably tomorrow.

      Thanks again to Mark for the exercise.
      Last edited by Centos; 09-15-2017, 09:52 PM.
      STANDARD DISCLAIMER: I'm a wannabe, take whatever I write with a huge grain of salt.

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      • #4
        Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

        Originally posted by AnconRanger View Post
        a last thought--i believe what made LET SLIP THE DOGS OF WAR stand out so much to me was the writing, subject matter, and the twist at the end also kind of reminded me of an old bluegrass song, BRINGING MARY HOME, about a man who sees a girl by the road at night, he picks her up in his car and she tells him where she lives, he takes her there but when he gets there she is not in his car. he goes to the door, knocks, her mother opens the door, he tries to explain what he cannot, and she tells him that 10 years ago her daughter got killed where he had first seen her. and every year, on that date, someone shows up at her door as they are trying to bring her daughter, mary, home. she is a ghost. always liked those kind of stories. good old song. i did not see the twist coming in the short script and it worked. good stuff!
        That sounds like a better one than Laurie (Strange Things Happen in This World) ...

        https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M0N4nyYS5aA

        Or Phantom 309 ... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zCeVP9WuA6I

        Bringing Mary Home ... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BpZbcSzd1vk
        STANDARD DISCLAIMER: I'm a wannabe, take whatever I write with a huge grain of salt.

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        • #5
          Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

          Well done the winners! Fun contest, lots of good reads.

          My votes went like:

          1st - Dog Day of Summer
          2nd - Jacob's Point
          3rd - Let Slip the Dogs of War

          I had Jacob's Point in 1st and Let Slip in 2nd and Summer Daze in 3rd place, but then Dog Day of Summer got posted and I really liked that, so Summer Daze got bumped out of my top three, alas. I couldn't tell who'd written what.

          For what it's worth here are my thoughts on the entries, scribbled as I gave them a second read.

          Ghosts and Demons

          I liked what I read and I think this could be something, but right now it's like an excerpt, a slice of something bigger. Just missed a vote. Budget consideration: CGI required.

          Let Slip the Dogs of War

          A pretty readable period piece that ends up being a ghost story. Gets a vote. Budget consideration: needs a stuntman for that fall into the river, something less dangerous could work just as well.

          Summer Daze

          BOBBY DAZE's interaction with the unnamed WOMAN (why are their names always capped?) was amusing. The ending was kinda quirky and just seemed to fizzle out, though. Just missed a vote. Budget consideration: requires dogs that can act.

          Killer Tower

          This felt like a TV movie adapted from a Stephen King story, I wondered if you (the author) visualized animated CGI or just clever camerawork angles and threatening music. Jerry learns a lesson in humility, I guess, though the image of two pylons duking it out is kinda bizarre. Just missed a vote. Usually I just ignore typos and try to concentrate on the writing instead but "Jerry's eyebrows are deeply frown." really does need fixed.

          Dogtown

          Mine. I am of course astounded that it wasn't a runaway winner with all the votes awarded. No politics intended, BULLDOG PRESIDENT doesn't have orange hair or anything, it's just a bit of fun. Budget consideration: rubber dog masks required.

          Jacob's Point

          I liked most of this, the trained killer bees were a wee bit bizarre though, I mean how can you plan what bees will do? They could as easily have flown away and not touched anyone. What all this does for Iris is uncertain, and what's to stop the punks from coming after Jacob later goes unanswered, but the writing and visuals were clear and the main character risks his a$$ to get revenge on those who wronged him, so I felt this entry earned a righteous vote.

          A Deep Sleep

          By the time I finished reading this entry, I was thinking there's just too much I wouldn't know if I were watching the movie -- it's maybe explained in the script but how would it be conveyed to me as a viewer? The bigger question maybe is what's the point of James's long sleep experience? There doesn't seem to be one. With something like this, I'd maybe be trying to think of ways to convey his horror at being trapped and unable to move or speak. Unfortunately this isn't touched upon, James's inner thoughts remain kinda bland and uninvolving, sorry.

          Dog Day of Summer

          I could happily have watched more of this. What we have here, unless I'm mistaken, is a clever idea worthy of a movie, a town full of were-people who turn into savage dogs during daylight hours (or is it the other way round, are they were-dogs who turn into people? haha) and a were-dog-people hunter who's a werewolf. Uh, at least I think that's what's happening. Has this already been done before? Not sure. Gets a vote! Budget consideration: requires CGI and/or dogs that can act.

          And a big nod to Mark for doing the biz and putting up the prize.

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          • #6
            Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

            Writing Contest Comments (I just decided to go ahead and post them -- please, don't anyone take anything I say too seriously. These are just my personal opinions.)

            Ghosts and Demons

            Good descriptive writing. Good characterization. It had characters you cared about (or detested). Kind of hard to understand, however, why Jill would stay in the house after the creep's attack. And this is after she stayed when the ghost and demons showed up (which is closer to being believable, depending on how desperate she was). Still a strong story. This one got my #2 vote.

            Nigglings ... Several "it's" where "its" should have been used. One "mans throttling ..." where "man's" should have been used. Actually it probably should have been "ghost's" throttling hand ... And twice the ghost's "fist" throttled demons. A fist is incapable of throttling.

            Let Slip the Dogs of War

            Characters you cared about. Strong story. Good pacing. Good twist at the end. Maybe the dialog was a little "on the nose" but it read better the second time through. This one got my #1 vote.

            Niggling ... One line took me out of the story and just didn't "feel" right. When Jonah is told "this is going to hurt" he responds with "you think???" Maybe I'm wrong, but I just can't see this line in a Civil War time frame.

            Summer Daze

            Just too many suspension of disbelief moments. One piled on top of another. Didn't feel "real." The first line that pulled me completely out of the story is when the dog "smiled." Dogs don't smile. While I sympathize with the plight of abused dogs, this script came across as overwrought and "preachy." I think the point could be made more subtly and believably.

            Killer Tower

            This one was weird, but it entertained me. It was so over the top that it was fun. Good description, strong ending. And weird. What more can I say. I liked it enough to give it the #3 vote. In a weaker contest this one might have won, but it was up against some pretty good short scripts.

            Dogtown

            Probably a personal thing, but this was was hard to get into to for me. The description was strong but it just seemed the dialog (puns and quips) didn't really fit the situation ... especially when Mr. Goodboy (who is supposedly "frozen with fear") makes the comment about "doggie style" when he's about to be killed. That's kind of the way the way the whole script worked for me. A serious undertone, not taken seriously by the characters -- it was hard to reconcile the two.

            Jacob's Point

            I liked the description, the dialog and the characters – (Jacob and Iris) and their interaction – but I would liked to see a more clever and less vicious "revenge" than what Jacob (and Iris?) concocted. It seemed petty and beneath them. I would have also liked to have a seen a stronger ending ... something more substantial than just Jacob getting a new car from Iris. Getting a package from your next-door neighbor seemed kind of an anti-climax. I was thinking maybe Jacob would BE next door with Iris.

            A Deep Sleep

            I liked the way this one started, good description, decent dialog (though a little on the nose) ... but it didn't seem to go anywhere. After working through this story you would think that we would at least get to see James wake up and – somehow – the new Amanda and James just (miraculously) hit it off. James wouldn't even know he's in a whole new world (at first). But we really didn't get a resolution (in my opinion). Just a series of events that *may* have gone somewhere (though we weren't allowed to see it if they did). Honestly, kind of frustrating. Promising start though.

            Dog Day of Summer

            My pathetic attempt. I thought I was "clever" with the Lee Grant (North and South), blue/gray eyes, blue/gray car -- but honestly, I really didn't set this story up at all. It was supposed to be a world where werewolves and weredogs were mortal enemies and Lee Grant was a legendary werewolf warrior. Sorry for submitting something so unfinished. (And someone gave this a number one vote?!)
            STANDARD DISCLAIMER: I'm a wannabe, take whatever I write with a huge grain of salt.

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            • #7
              Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

              Originally posted by dpaterso View Post
              Dog Day of Summer

              I could happily have watched more of this. What we have here, unless I'm mistaken, is a clever idea worthy of a movie, a town full of were-people who turn into savage dogs during daylight hours (or is it the other way round, are they were-dogs who turn into people? haha) and a were-dog-people hunter who's a werewolf. Uh, at least I think that's what's happening. Has this already been done before? Not sure. Gets a vote! Budget consideration: requires CGI and/or dogs that can act.
              So you're the ONE who voted for this? But you (surprisingly, considering how sparse it was) did get where I was trying to go. (Or where I would have gone if I actually put more effort into it.) Thanks for the kind comments.
              STANDARD DISCLAIMER: I'm a wannabe, take whatever I write with a huge grain of salt.

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              • #8
                Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

                Originally posted by Centos View Post
                That sounds like a better one than Laurie (Strange Things Happen in This World) ...

                https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M0N4nyYS5aA

                Or Phantom 309 ... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zCeVP9WuA6I

                Bringing Mary Home ... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BpZbcSzd1vk
                Nobody does this stuff better than the Irish.

                Three Little Babes

                Hick's Farewell

                The Long Black Veil

                The Turkish Song of the Damned

                Now you know why I'm demented.
                "I just couldn't live in a world without me."

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                • #9
                  Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

                  Originally posted by Centos View Post
                  Writing Contest Comments (I just decided to go ahead and post them -- please, don't anyone take anything I say too seriously. These are just my personal opinions.)

                  Ghosts and Demons

                  Good descriptive writing. Good characterization. It had characters you cared about (or detested). Kind of hard to understand, however, why Jill would stay in the house after the creep's attack. And this is after she stayed when the ghost and demons showed up (which is closer to being believable, depending on how desperate she was). Still a strong story. This one got my #2 vote.

                  Nigglings ... Several "it's" where "its" should have been used. One "mans throttling ..." where "man's" should have been used. Actually it probably should have been "ghost's" throttling hand ... And twice the ghost's "fist" throttled demons. A fist is incapable of throttling.
                  "A fist is incapable of throttling." Depends on how big the hand is and how hard it is throttling. In this case the hand was really big and was throttling really hard. Throttle a straw, you'll see what I mean. I actually took fist out at one point but added it back in, because that's the image I saw.

                  The "it's" "its" "mans" "ghosts" thing bugs the crap out of me. My only defense is, I wrote this in around two and a half hours and proofread once. Proofreading my own stuff is practically pointless, because I always see it the way I "meant" to write, not what I actually wrote. Normally I let my daughter proofread my stuff and she catches most of this. But since I was at work, it was only me and my broken eyes.

                  I did know the "why she doesn't get the hell out of the house" thing was a weak point. At first I was going to write in an elaborate thingamajig that was chasing her but decided that that was too cumbersome. I tried to hint at the beginning that what was floating around the house was not as bad as what she was running from. I then decided it would be better to justify her staying because she thought the big ghost would protect her -- that's why she ran back up to the bedroom near the end. But then I promptly forgot to put that reasoning in the story.

                  If anybody is wondering why the title had "Ghosts" (plural), it's because the last page, which I decided not to write, had more ghosts. Right or wrong it just felt better to stop it where I stopped it.

                  Thanks everyone for the 2nd place vote on this -- I think you were exceedingly generous. This was pretty rough and dpaterso is right -- even though it wasn't my intent, it does read like part of a story. And maybe it will be sometime.

                  I'll try to make some comments on the other (more worthy entries later), but for now, my votes...

                  1) Let Slip the Dogs of War
                  One of those you read and say: "This is the winner", even if you haven't read anything else yet. One line of dialogue really bothered me. But than decided that dialogue is fixable -- this is a great story.
                  2) Dog Day of Summer
                  I gave this a second-place vote because I liked the description. After reading dpaterso's review, I think I should have read it again. I think I missed a lot. (Although it wouldn't have beaten Let Slip the Dogs anyway.)
                  3) Jacob's Point
                  I considered this one for number one -- well written, then it dropped to two, then three. Based mostly on the revenge. I don't know what I expected, but when the wise, old lady got involved I was hoping for something a little more profound and a little less petty.

                  Thanks again, Mark. I was surprised you didn't have an entry. It seems like with all the work you did you should have at least had the fun of writing an entry.
                  "I just couldn't live in a world without me."

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                  • #10
                    Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

                    Originally posted by StoryWriter View Post
                    "A fist is incapable of throttling." Depends on how big the hand is and how hard it is throttling. In this case the hand was really big and was throttling really hard. Throttle a straw, you'll see what I mean. I actually took fist out at one point but added it back in, because that's the image I saw.
                    Okay. But a fist is a hand closed in on itself. A fist, by definition, is an empty hand, or rather a hand filled with its own fingers. Or, as Webster's defines it ... "1. The hand with the fingers doubled into the palm; the closed hand, especially as clinched tightly for the purpose of striking a blow." Your ghost's hand would be closed around a demon's neck. Not closed in on itself.

                    (It's getting really niggling now. Sorry.)
                    STANDARD DISCLAIMER: I'm a wannabe, take whatever I write with a huge grain of salt.

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                    • #11
                      Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

                      Based on how the premise, execution, and writing hit me
                      strictly subjectively on a scale of 1 to 5 each, not many points
                      separated all the entries. Good stuff everybody. Thanks Mark.
                      1. Jacob’s Point
                      2. Summer Daze
                      3. Killer Tower

                      Premise Execution Writing Total

                      Ghosts and Demons 3 3 3 9
                      Let Slip Dogs of War 4 3 3 10
                      Summer Daze 4 4 3 11+
                      Killer Tower 3 4 4 11
                      Dogtown 4 3 3 10
                      Jacob’s Point 4 4 4 12
                      Dog Days of Summer 3 3 4 10
                      Last edited by jonpiper; 09-19-2017, 09:43 AM. Reason: correct error in last entry writing score

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                      • #12
                        Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

                        Congratulations to all the writers, and especially our champ this round, DangoForth. Creating a reasonably satisfying story in 8 pages is hard, like building a brick wall with 25 grains of sand. Boot camp!

                        My top 3, some comments and my favorite lines from all:

                        1st: Let Slip the Dogs of War
                        2nd: Ghosts and Demons
                        3rd: Summer Daze

                        Let Slip the Dogs of War
                        The writing, execution and theme (humanity over labels) all came together for me. Some OTN dialogue.
                        Favorite line: She [Sally] suddenly stands, then turns and begins walking away. Over her shoulder, she spares one last look for Elijah - SALLY - Then save another life, Elijah Freeman.

                        Ghosts and Demons
                        Nice description of creepy setting. Confused why girl was sleeping in a “derelict” house. Why are all these demons, ghosts appearing now, years after the murder? Who was the benevolent ghost?
                        Favorite line: The Demon/Bart is even uglier than the Human/Bart and as it rises, it melts away the flesh to white ash.

                        Summer Daze
                        I like stories where the a-hole gets his/her comeuppance. Lots of dense action lines. Probably could use some trimming early on, maybe just start with the guy trying to get his dogs out. Nice to have a better idea who the “Woman” is, given her main role.
                        Favorite line: WOMAN - Get in. Just for a bit. Nothing like what you've put your dog through, of course... Call it...a crash course in pet owner training.

                        Dogtown
                        Cool concept, Twilight Zone-ish. Lots of OTN dialogue. Very tough lifting to create an entire story set in a fantasy world in just 8 pages!
                        Favorite line: The MAITRE'D also wears a collar with a dog tag. He looks down his nose at Cheryl, as if she's something he's just scraped off his expensive shoe.

                        Dog Day of Summer
                        Interesting premise, but like others, we need just a little context – why is this happening. How did things get this way? Good description of the graphic killing scenes. I didn't understand the ending. Why were the weird townspeople celebrating the guy’s death before they knew he was dead? What was this guy’s history with the town?
                        Favorite line: Lee spins in SLOW MOTION, noting the position of each of the closest dogs. He sheaths the sword and pulls out two of his pistols.

                        Killer Tower
                        Hmmm, not sure what to say about this one, at least the tower’s weren’t talking . I kept thinking the man (or the writer, lol) was hallucinating, but I'm still not sure. If this were part of a larger narrative on drug use or psychosis, I think it was well written. As a stand alone story, not so much.
                        Favorite line: Jerry looks up to the top of the tower. Somehow, the tip has twisted towards him. The two red operation lights at the to look strangely like eyes. Eyes that are staring at him!

                        A Deep Sleep
                        Again, interesting premise. Nice to have a little background on why this guy chose to be part of the study, other than he has the hots for the assistant once he gets there. A lot of OTN dialogue - which could have been replaced by the character's action. I’m not sure what the writer was trying to say with this story, i.e. theme?.
                        Favorite line: Suddenly James opens his eyes wide. His eyes rotate in their sockets as far as possible in every direction. His mouth opens and closes. His heart rate begins to rise.

                        As for mine (Jacob's Point), I started with this story being darker and more violent, but it was too plot heavy and dark for what I wanted it to do, so I steered toward something on the edgy side of Disney. That said, I agree with the comments that the revenge and ending needed more meat. Full disclosure - this was a bit autobiographical. As a young kid, I had an elderly Englishwoman as a babysitter who told mesmerizing stories and showed me how to do lots of things. We were also constantly at "war" with our rivals across the alley. We threw lots of stuff at each other, apples, rocks, snowballs, and... yes... I filled a jar with bees and slung it.

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                        • #13
                          Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

                          thanks to all for the helpful feedback on my effort!

                          Storywriter--that is a killer version of THE LONG BLACK VEIL. never heard that one before. great song.

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                          • #14
                            Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

                            Originally posted by bioprofessor View Post
                            Creating a reasonably satisfying story in 8 pages is hard, like building a brick wall with 25 grains of sand.
                            So true. Thanks for the valuable feedback bio, dpat, and Centos.

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                            • #15
                              Re: Results - Dog Days of Summer

                              Congratulations, DangoForth, for winning the contest and a big thank you to Mark for organizing this and all the writers and readers for participating and reading and voting and commenting.


                              Ghosts and Demons
                              Got my third vote. Interesting ghost story. "The door that is not there" is good, although it rises questions. I had a couple of "why this happens"? If Jill has been kidnapped (and it took me a bit to understand that), why can she move freely in the house? And most important, why Eddie cares about this girl in particular and decides to act now? It seems this is not the first time Bart acts. Also why is Eddie so strong? Are ghosts more powerful than demons? What's the difference between a ghost and a demon? (simply good/bad people?). And why doesn't Bart see the ghost and Jill does? There are some cliches like exposition by news and vicious vilain archetypes. In general, it's well written, the ending is a bit predictable and I wonder what's the theme underneath the story.


                              Let Slip the Dogs of War
                              Got my first vote. Very good descriptions and writing. The visuals are good, very atmospheric. I could imagine the place and the characters perfectly. The main problem for me is that it is very predictable, although I have heard other writers' reviews and it seems it's not the general idea. The moment that killed it for me is when Sallie tells Jonah they have to go, then he finds a stick to support himself and follows. She didn't make any intention of helping and, hence, have any physical contact. To me it would make sense that she tries to help him. That made me think she may not be who we think she is. It would be good to try to deceive the audience a-la-Sixth Sense and have Sally try to help him and Jonah refusing because he's too big or proud. Apart from that, it may be a bit fortunate finding two enemy soldiers sharing the same vision about life and war.


                              Summer Daze
                              Got my second vote (interesting that I voted for the first scripts in the list... coincidence? next time I'll read in reverse order ). There are some very good descriptions in this script, although some things got me out, like "dogs bark in harmony to Springsteen" or using The Great Escape as an exposition tool to know what the dogs are doing. The Great Dogs Escape is a fun scene, though. The structure is a bit strange, it looks like two stories put together. First we have the dogs, fighting the evil owner. I thought Dog was the protagonist. Then we go to the Dogs Shelter and we find this Woman who takes the lead (Bobby never does, so to me he's not the protagonist). So, who's this story about?


                              Dogtown
                              Very good beginning, mysterious, strange and atmospheric, made me wonder what is happening here. However when I saw the hybrids, I couldn't continue believing the situation. How this society came to life? This is not like Planet of the Apes where a virus provokes a change in society. Someone has to make these hybrids. And when they do, how do they get to power? I know it's not part of the story but I felt it would be hard to explain. Again, maybe not necessary. Dog humor is nice (Cheryl ordering water "in a glass"), but it's a bit overdone, too many dog jokes made the humour fade a little. The scene where Cynthia gets the gun reminded me of Godfather. Also a bit exposition here with Godboy explaining that they got the power, etc. Finally, if the uprising really begins tonight, who is Cynthia? She's clearly more than we think, but there's no time to elaborate.


                              Jacob's Point
                              I liked the writing, and the characters, they are charming. The beginning is a bit slow, and some details didn't add to the story (grasshopper). The Old Woman seems to have some character in her, it seems an interesting person I'd like to know more about. I found that Jacob's reaction: counter attacking, was a bit out of his character. Sure, the Old Woman, probably told him what she did to her bullies but that, even though inspiring, may not be enough to change Jacob that way. I cannot find the theme underneath the story. It's basically a boy takes revenge on his bullies thanks to the advice of an Old Woman. It would be great to show some bonding between them, like for example, they spend time planning the attack. Again, 8 pages is not enough for this.


                              A Deep Sleep
                              I had a problem with James' character. I didn't like him, he felt very superficial. He goes to this test and suddenly starts flirting with Amanda. Unless he knew she was there and that's the reason he takes the test (but I didn't read that). Also the reason James gives to do the test is very light and undefined ("I want direction in my life"). There's a few why's I couldn't answer, like what happened? Why did the experiment fail? Why doesn't James age? What is the story about? There's no action from the protagonist (James?), he literally goes to sleep for a thousand years.


                              Dog Day of Summer
                              Really good and atmospheric writing, very good descriptions. At some points it seemed like a Tarantino scene. Reading some other reviews, I didn't understand the weredog/werewolf/werehuman situation. Again, it's hard to understand this world in just 8 pages. Why dogs behave like that? It seems there's a war going on with the humans. The ending seemed disconnected from the rest to me. Why are those people celebrating? Do they mean Lee when the woman screams "He's dead"? That part is a bit confusing, it feels incomplete as if this was part of a bigger story


                              About mine, Killer Tower, I know it wouldn't be everyone's cup of tea, it is weird and over the top, indeed, which was actually the idea. Answering to some feedback, I was actually thinking of filming this in live action, with quite a few VFX (that will take time, so not my priority). About the writer hallucinating... is there any other way?

                              Thanks, everyone, it was fun.
                              Check out my website with my productions: http://www.picturesplusproductions.com

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