Writing POV

[Matt the Cat]

Im writing a short, and the first section is all shot POV. the camera effectively IS the character, ala ENTER THE VOID.

My question.
Would it be correct to add a note, stating the above, then name the character and write as normal.

Or better to use WE and OUR

eg.
Our eyes snap open,
We scan our surroundings etc.

[jcgary]

Read PASSENGERS by GJ Pruss. Then steal from it mercilessly.

Write it all in the first person, I say.


INT. CHECK CASHING STORE - NIGHT

A wino throws up in the corner. Vomit splatters my shoes. I approach the window, scratched plexi hiding the CASHIER.

ME
I need to - I need a jacket.

CASHIER
That's great, hon, I need a manicure.

ME
No, I mean, I need money. To buy a jacket.

I slide a check into the slot. I already signed it.

ME
I get paid on Friday.

CASHIER
Me too.

The Cashier stamps my check, counts out cash, slides it through the slot.

She winks at me. Why does she wink at me?

[Gwai Lo]

I wrote a feature length script that's intended to be 100% POV, so I wrote it in first person. I didn't even mess with "we" or "our" or standard third person when I started out because it was so awkward to write unless it was first person. I stuck to present tense. Got a hold of PASSENGERS after I had done a couple of drafts and saw Pruss did it the same way. Got a hold of a script called DARK MOON that did first person in past tense and I didn't think it worked as well as present tense.

[Matt the Cat]

Hey guys, thanks.

I started doing WE and Our and it felt a mess.
Managed to get a copy of ENTER THE VOID, and Gasper has done exactly as you describe. first person, with a Director's note at the very start.

Anyone that can offer me a copy of PASSENGERS, please PM me.

Thanks again.

Matt.