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  • Creativexec - is this potentially interesting?

    Hi...any feedback you're able to give me is much appreciated.


    TITLE: Unstoppable

    Sarah Wade suffered one beating too many and informed on her husband - armed robber, Jack Wade.

    She believes him to have died in prison - but in reality the government have chosen his as the perfect candidate for a project to create the ultimate assassin. His memories should have been erased. They weren't. An unstoppable force, Jack is hungry for revenge...



    If this is of any interest, I'd be happy to send you a complete treatment. But, as I mentioned, any kind of feedback is useful. Thanks in advance.

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    What is the wife doing through the story - hiding
    from him?

    Keep her active. In THE FUGITIVE although Harrison
    Ford is on the run, he is out to solve a mystery. This
    keeps him on the offensive while being chased.

    A script gets redundant quickly if it is nothing but a
    series of story beats where the protag runs from the
    antag.

    Although the protagonist seems to be the suffering
    wife, the more interesting part of the story is with
    the hubby-turned-trained-assassin.

    You need to present the log line in a manner that
    allows one to see what the protagonist is trying
    to accomplish.

    Who is your hero?
    What does s/he want?
    What's stopping her/him?

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