Hey guys,
I have a bit of a problem that I can't figure out, I'd be honored if you could share your ideas.
On two different scripts, readers had problems with the emotional flow of the story and only after I pointed to an important dialogue scene on page 20 they suddenly realized that that scene was more important than they had thought while reading. "Yeah, that changes everything." (We're talking about 'I'll read it once and I got a lot of other scripts today'-producers)
Addressing that very issue I got the response, that there's so much happening in the scenes leading up to that point, unforeseen jokes, twists, etc. that, in general, readers stop seeing what's important and what's not when continuing with the story. Doesn't mean they're out, because the scene work afterwards is still okay, but they lose the emotional connection to the main characters. In one case for the next 30 pages...
Hmm... Now I'm lost. I seem to be needing the equivalent of a big post-it-note saying 'THIS IS IMPORTANT. READ CAREFULLY. IT WILL PAY OFF. SERIOUSLY.'
Making other scenes less interesting doesn't seem to be right. On the other hand I'm aware of a saying in the cinematography world, that 'if you light every shot like a Rembrandt, no shot will be important.'
Were you at that place? How did you get out?
Career-wise I'm on my 3rd paid script and working on polishes, etc. since last year. I'm trying to make every page as special as it can be. No script has been shot yet.
Thank you.
I have a bit of a problem that I can't figure out, I'd be honored if you could share your ideas.
On two different scripts, readers had problems with the emotional flow of the story and only after I pointed to an important dialogue scene on page 20 they suddenly realized that that scene was more important than they had thought while reading. "Yeah, that changes everything." (We're talking about 'I'll read it once and I got a lot of other scripts today'-producers)
Addressing that very issue I got the response, that there's so much happening in the scenes leading up to that point, unforeseen jokes, twists, etc. that, in general, readers stop seeing what's important and what's not when continuing with the story. Doesn't mean they're out, because the scene work afterwards is still okay, but they lose the emotional connection to the main characters. In one case for the next 30 pages...
Hmm... Now I'm lost. I seem to be needing the equivalent of a big post-it-note saying 'THIS IS IMPORTANT. READ CAREFULLY. IT WILL PAY OFF. SERIOUSLY.'
Making other scenes less interesting doesn't seem to be right. On the other hand I'm aware of a saying in the cinematography world, that 'if you light every shot like a Rembrandt, no shot will be important.'
Were you at that place? How did you get out?
Career-wise I'm on my 3rd paid script and working on polishes, etc. since last year. I'm trying to make every page as special as it can be. No script has been shot yet.
Thank you.
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