Re: That movie with the kid and the four elements
Here's an excerpt from THE HAPPENING script to prove my point:
If any of us wrote that and posted it on the Script Pages forum we'd be eviscerated for it. That's over a page of high value real estate in a slim 106 page script. The fact that it comes from someone who gets paid to do this for a living is utterly shameful.
Here's an excerpt from THE HAPPENING script to prove my point:
WOMAN ON CELL PHONE
It's okay honey. It's okay.
(to group)
She's so scared.
(to daughter)
You just stay in that room. Don't open
that door for nothing.
(listens)
...It's okay there's a tree outside your
window baby. It's not going to do
nothing.
(she listens and then tells the
group)
She keeps saying everyone's dead
outside.
Elliot and Alma exchange a look.
WOMAN ON CELL PHONE
(to daughter)
You just stay in your room baby.
(listens)
...What I can't understand what
you're saying?
(listens)
What?
(listens)
...I can't understand what you're
saying.
(listens)
...What baby?
(to group)
She's not making any sense.
(listens)
...Baby I can't understand what
you're saying.
(beat)
...Stacy?
(beat)
...Stacy?
(to group)
I can't hear anything.
WOMAN ON CELL PHONE
(yells into the phone)
...Stacy!
(beat)
...Stacy Ann you answer me right now!
Elliot walks away from the group as the woman continues to yell for her daughter. Elliot walks to a lone spot on the road and sits down.
It's okay honey. It's okay.
(to group)
She's so scared.
(to daughter)
You just stay in that room. Don't open
that door for nothing.
(listens)
...It's okay there's a tree outside your
window baby. It's not going to do
nothing.
(she listens and then tells the
group)
She keeps saying everyone's dead
outside.
Elliot and Alma exchange a look.
WOMAN ON CELL PHONE
(to daughter)
You just stay in your room baby.
(listens)
...What I can't understand what
you're saying?
(listens)
What?
(listens)
...I can't understand what you're
saying.
(listens)
...What baby?
(to group)
She's not making any sense.
(listens)
...Baby I can't understand what
you're saying.
(beat)
...Stacy?
(beat)
...Stacy?
(to group)
I can't hear anything.
WOMAN ON CELL PHONE
(yells into the phone)
...Stacy!
(beat)
...Stacy Ann you answer me right now!
Elliot walks away from the group as the woman continues to yell for her daughter. Elliot walks to a lone spot on the road and sits down.
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