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Old 01-08-2011, 12:38 PM   #1
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I have a scene where someone is typing a message on a phone and I was wondering how that's done (typing it in the screenplay, not on a phone). I've been writing something like:

CLOSE UP ON PHONE MESSAGE:

PHONE MESSAGE HERE.

I've never had to do this before and I'd like to know the standard (if there is one).

Thanks in advance!
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Old 01-08-2011, 01:06 PM   #2
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Assuming (?) this is a spec script, how about you just write:
Joan thumbs text message to Frank:
"[text of message here]"
The reader gets what the reader needs to know. The director can worry about the camera later.
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Old 01-08-2011, 02:26 PM   #3
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I have a scene where someone is typing a message on a phone and I was wondering how that's done (typing it in the screenplay, not on a phone). I've been writing something like:

CLOSE UP ON PHONE MESSAGE:

PHONE MESSAGE HERE.
What you have is probably clear enough. The conventional way to draw attention to close-up detail that the audience must see is:

INSERT:

Jim's cell phone screen as he types: "Angie ur l8 cu 2moro"

But if you prefer you can also write:

CLOSE-UP: (or "C.U." or CLOSE ON)

Jim's cell phone screen as he types: "Angie ur l8 cu 2moro"
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Old 01-08-2011, 03:02 PM   #4
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Assuming (?) this is a spec script, how about you just write:
Joan thumbs text message to Frank:
"[text of message here]"
The reader gets what the reader needs to know. The director can worry about the camera later.
This is the way I would do it also. You're directing the camera without mentioning the camera. Obviously, if the text message is shown, it's going to have to be a close-up, but there's no reason to specifically mention it in a reading script.
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Old 01-08-2011, 10:33 PM   #5
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I prefer to suggest camera angles in how I write the scene, so I agree with Manchester and Centos. If you simply must call it out, INSERT is the way to indicate a close-up on text, according to The Screenwriter's Bible style guide.
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Old 01-10-2011, 11:24 AM   #6
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CLOSE UP ON PHONE MESSAGE:

PHONE MESSAGE HERE.

I've never had to do this before and I'd like to know the standard (if there is one).
Here's the thing:

You don't have to write "Close up on phone" or "Insert" or whatever.

You can just write:

John's phone beeps. He glances at the screen. A text from Jill: "Meeting with the guy. Bring the stuff." He shoves the phone back in his pocket.

Now, I'm not saying that writing "insert" is wrong, but the trend in screenplays seems to be towards less and less technical stuff like that in favor of improving the reading experience.

If you wanted to emphasize it more, you could write:

A beep from his pocket. John pulls out

HIS PHONE

where there's a text message from John: "Meeting with the guy. Bring the stuff."

or -

John looks at the

TEXT MESSAGE:

"Meeting with the guy. Bring the stuff."

You have a lot of flexibility here. Don't get hung up on it. Personally, I feel like "INSERT" or "CLOSE UP ON" breaks up the reading experience in a negative way and feels somewhat archaic and faux-technical.

But, of course, your mileage may vary and I want to emphasize that it's NOT wrong. I just personally don't like it, and you should be aware that it's also not necessary.
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Old 01-11-2011, 12:10 AM   #7
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Now, I'm not saying that writing "insert" is wrong, but the trend in screenplays seems to be towards less and less technical stuff like that in favor of improving the reading experience.

You have a lot of flexibility here. Don't get hung up on it. Personally, I feel like "INSERT" or "CLOSE UP ON" breaks up the reading experience in a negative way and feels somewhat archaic and faux-technical.

But, of course, your mileage may vary and I want to emphasize that it's NOT wrong.
I agree with this - I think the trend away from 'technical' terminology makes for a better read and allows more versatile creativity.
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