Hi guys.
After getting some very helpful advice from many users here, I'm doing a quick restructuring of a certain scene and since I couldn't find a similar example of how to do it in any of the pro scripts I've looked into, I need your help. I have a few ideas on how to do it, but I want to pick the one that flows the best.
As the title says, I have a scene which involves two conversations at two locations at the same time. Now, first thing I thought was - intercut. But, after analyzing the scene, I don't think it would be the way to go (maybe). I already have a different intercut scene in the script, but that one is an intercut phone conversation between two people at two different locations which is classic intercut since they are talking to one another, that's completely fine.
But this other particular scene involves 2 conversations that are happening at 2 different locations, both between 2 people = 4 people in total. How I was thinking of doing it with an intercut is this: (it's just an example scene of how I want to do it)
INT. KITCHEN - DAY
Tony and Mike are sitting at the kitchen table, eating their lunch. Mike notices Tony is depressed.
Mike
Are you ok?
Tony
No. I actually wanted to talk to you about something, but promise me you won't tell anyone.
Mike
I promise.
Tony
Ok, here goes…
INT. CLOTHING SHOP - DAY
Janet and Barbara look around the clothing shop. Janet is excited, but Barbara kinda just follows her, uninterested. Janet notices.
Janet
You seem down. What happened?
Barbara
Do you really want to know?
Janet
I'm your best friend, of course I do.
Barbara
Fine...
And now, I want to switch in between those two scenes, follow one conversation a bit, then switch to the other one, than back to the first one and so on because they are all talking about the same subject, so I don't want to follow one conversation and then after that switch to the other two characters and have the same conversation, but with some small alterations as they happen to be talking about the same thing at the same time. Do I just write ''Intercut between kitchen and clothing shop'' after Barbara's ''Fine'' and then just rack up dialogues on top of one another? I don't think that's a good idea as, even though it's established who is talking to who, I don't want it to seem like everyone is talking to each other when they're clearly not.
I have an option of writing scene headings again and again to break between the two scenes, but that seems dumb to do after literally every 2-3 sentences that the characters exchange. But if I had to choose, I guess this one would be the way to go - have like Tony and Mike bit, then when I want to switch to Janet and Barbara just write ''CLOTHING SHOP - SAME TIME'' and continue their conversation, then when I want to go back to Tony's and Mike's convo, I just write ''KITCHEN - SAME TIME'' and continue their bit and so on after every few sentences.
If anyone has any other ideas, please do tell.
After getting some very helpful advice from many users here, I'm doing a quick restructuring of a certain scene and since I couldn't find a similar example of how to do it in any of the pro scripts I've looked into, I need your help. I have a few ideas on how to do it, but I want to pick the one that flows the best.
As the title says, I have a scene which involves two conversations at two locations at the same time. Now, first thing I thought was - intercut. But, after analyzing the scene, I don't think it would be the way to go (maybe). I already have a different intercut scene in the script, but that one is an intercut phone conversation between two people at two different locations which is classic intercut since they are talking to one another, that's completely fine.
But this other particular scene involves 2 conversations that are happening at 2 different locations, both between 2 people = 4 people in total. How I was thinking of doing it with an intercut is this: (it's just an example scene of how I want to do it)
INT. KITCHEN - DAY
Tony and Mike are sitting at the kitchen table, eating their lunch. Mike notices Tony is depressed.
Mike
Are you ok?
Tony
No. I actually wanted to talk to you about something, but promise me you won't tell anyone.
Mike
I promise.
Tony
Ok, here goes…
INT. CLOTHING SHOP - DAY
Janet and Barbara look around the clothing shop. Janet is excited, but Barbara kinda just follows her, uninterested. Janet notices.
Janet
You seem down. What happened?
Barbara
Do you really want to know?
Janet
I'm your best friend, of course I do.
Barbara
Fine...
And now, I want to switch in between those two scenes, follow one conversation a bit, then switch to the other one, than back to the first one and so on because they are all talking about the same subject, so I don't want to follow one conversation and then after that switch to the other two characters and have the same conversation, but with some small alterations as they happen to be talking about the same thing at the same time. Do I just write ''Intercut between kitchen and clothing shop'' after Barbara's ''Fine'' and then just rack up dialogues on top of one another? I don't think that's a good idea as, even though it's established who is talking to who, I don't want it to seem like everyone is talking to each other when they're clearly not.
I have an option of writing scene headings again and again to break between the two scenes, but that seems dumb to do after literally every 2-3 sentences that the characters exchange. But if I had to choose, I guess this one would be the way to go - have like Tony and Mike bit, then when I want to switch to Janet and Barbara just write ''CLOTHING SHOP - SAME TIME'' and continue their conversation, then when I want to go back to Tony's and Mike's convo, I just write ''KITCHEN - SAME TIME'' and continue their bit and so on after every few sentences.
If anyone has any other ideas, please do tell.
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