Re: Halloween Hellraisers Writing Exercise [voting in progress, due close Wed 7 Nov]
Hi guys, just wanted top point out some more impressions on scripts
Delivery
- This piece was one of the few that left me feeling uncomfortable, in a good way. It tapped into a fear of mine - imagine being accused of a terrible crime and having no way to prove your version of things.
- Liked the main character, I was rooting for him.
- I didn't like the two pieces missing at the end, but that's just because I would have left it more ambiguous, so not a real negative.
Maskerade
- Really liked this! Great characters that I loved hating.
- The twist at the end was awesome. The writer really had me hating the group by the ending, so as creepy as it was I was still rooting for the protagonist.
- Top 3 without a doubt.
The Phantom Divorce Attorney
- There were glimpses of a fun voice from the writer, but it all did feel a bit rushed. Not that I'm being critical, that sort of happened with me too.
- I would have structured it a bit differently to make it more mysterious - I figured out what was going on pretty much immediately.
- As I think back, it seems clear the writer didn't want it to be too mysterious - halfway through the protagonist says "do you want me to sign it in blood?"
- Liked the final scene between the lawyer and protagonist. An interesting way to visualize him collecting his 'fee.'
The Haunted Outhouse
- Fun story, enjoyed the ending.
- My only comment is I wish there'd been more action with the original group, rather than them having so much of the story told to them.
- But I liked the vibe, the tension, the characters were likeable.
- The disappearing marshmallow was a fun touch, made creepier by the homeowner's nonchalance.
I think I got my top 3, PM'ing them now.
Best of luck to everyone and kudos to dpaterso and The Road Warrior for putting this together!
Hi guys, just wanted top point out some more impressions on scripts
Delivery
- This piece was one of the few that left me feeling uncomfortable, in a good way. It tapped into a fear of mine - imagine being accused of a terrible crime and having no way to prove your version of things.
- Liked the main character, I was rooting for him.
- I didn't like the two pieces missing at the end, but that's just because I would have left it more ambiguous, so not a real negative.
Maskerade
- Really liked this! Great characters that I loved hating.
- The twist at the end was awesome. The writer really had me hating the group by the ending, so as creepy as it was I was still rooting for the protagonist.
- Top 3 without a doubt.
The Phantom Divorce Attorney
- There were glimpses of a fun voice from the writer, but it all did feel a bit rushed. Not that I'm being critical, that sort of happened with me too.
- I would have structured it a bit differently to make it more mysterious - I figured out what was going on pretty much immediately.
- As I think back, it seems clear the writer didn't want it to be too mysterious - halfway through the protagonist says "do you want me to sign it in blood?"
- Liked the final scene between the lawyer and protagonist. An interesting way to visualize him collecting his 'fee.'
The Haunted Outhouse
- Fun story, enjoyed the ending.
- My only comment is I wish there'd been more action with the original group, rather than them having so much of the story told to them.
- But I liked the vibe, the tension, the characters were likeable.
- The disappearing marshmallow was a fun touch, made creepier by the homeowner's nonchalance.
I think I got my top 3, PM'ing them now.
Best of luck to everyone and kudos to dpaterso and The Road Warrior for putting this together!
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