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Old 01-16-2018, 12:08 PM   #11
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Default Re: How do you signify a short break between two different shots?

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I like that a lot--it's clean and your reader gets the point without wasting a lot of ink.
You do realize the Trottier example has nothing to do with signifing a short break between shots?
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Old 01-16-2018, 03:15 PM   #12
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Default Re: How do you signify a short break between two different shots?

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Something like:
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INT. BEDROOM -- NIGHT Vader awakes. He gets out of bed. INT. LANDING -- A BIT LATER We hear the toilet door flush. Vader emerges from the bathroom.
Using Trottier's example:

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INT. VADER'S HOUSE -- BEDROOM -- NIGHT Vader awakes. He gets out of bed. LANDING -- LATER We hear the toilet door flush. Vader emerges from the bathroom.
I don't know if it's really worth beating yourself up over this:

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INT. VADER'S HOUSE -- BEDROOM -- NIGHT Vader awakes. He gets out of bed. LANDING We hear the toilet door flush. Vader emerges from the bathroom.
The very fact that the "he gets out of bed", is above the "Vader emerges from the bathroom", in the script, strongly implies that the bathroom emergence follows the getting out of bed. It suggests chronological order, the passage of time.

Unless there's some serious reason to indicate how long he spent in the bathroom -- people will get it.

At least I hope so. I wouldn't want to be the guy who acted confused by the whole thing:
"So wait -- did Vader get out of bed, in his bedroom at the EXACT same time he emerged from the bathroom, on the landing, or what? How does he emerge from the bathroom, on the landing, while he's simultaneously getting out of bed in the bedroom? And why does "Vader awakes" come before "Vader emerges from the bathroom", in the script? Why aren't we given any coherent time-frame to figure this all out? It's just all too confusing!"
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Old 04-29-2018, 03:24 AM   #13
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Default Re: How do you signify a short break between two different shots?

TwoBrad was correct in this discussion.
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Old 04-29-2018, 06:29 AM   #14
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Default Re: How do you signify a short break between two different shots?

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How do you signify a short break between two different shots?
What kind of short break between two shots? Something like a 'lavatory break'? Maybe the sound of a toilet flush and the character then emerging from a bathroom would be enough to indicate almost exactly that amount of time passing.

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INT. VADER'S HOUSE -- BEDROOM -- NIGHT Vader awakes. He gets out of bed. LANDING We hear the toilet door flush. Vader emerges from the bathroom.
What!? Two Vaders!?

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