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Old 08-14-2019, 04:04 PM   #11
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INSERT - CELLPHONE SCREEN: Text
I write it like that. No one's said "WRONG!"

If you have to drop the actual text down a line in order for it to fit the page, the text is probably too long for an audience to read in a shot, IMO.
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Old 08-14-2019, 10:56 PM   #12
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Perfect, thanks! I have a handful of these in my script and hated how they were laid out. This is much better. All the texts are very short.
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Old 08-15-2019, 05:42 PM   #13
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just be consistent with your writing style so a reader can understand what you're trying to convey

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INT. PRISON YARD - CONT'

Apple walks the yard with Fatty and Jester...

They group moves from the weight benches across the yard to

BASKET BALL COURTS ... they hover around the outside of the court and watch the game.

BING -- SOUND OF TEXT MESSAGE

BALLERS STOP and turn to the group -- Apple looks down for a second, then at Fatty... everyone turns to Fatty

Apple give him a shove, that knocks him back

APPLE
you holding out on us? Where's the phone? You eat it?

Jester
Bet you it's in his ass by now...

Fatty shoves Jester

FATTY
Looking for an excuse to get in my ass?

Jester puts his ear up to Fatty's butt and pretends to make a phone call

JESTER
Hello mom? Where am I calling from? Weeeelllll....

EVERYONE LAUGHS... then goes back to what they were doing

INT. APPLE'S PRISON CELL - LATER

Apple sits on the toilet -- FART -- PLOP of a turd hitting water... Apple GRUNTS loudly and a HUGE SPLASH

Jester stands up

JESTER
I'm leaving man, be back in a bit.

Apple watches him leave and

BING -- SOUND OF TEXT MESSAGE

He reaches down between his legs

-- Pulls out a large bag covered in feces

and quickly places it into the sink and washes it off, dries his hands and takes out the cell phone. He hits the button and the phone comes alive...

THREE TEXTS liter down the screen
BM: 9!!CALL ME!
BM: WE GOT A SNITCH! CALL ME!
BM: GET THAT PHONE OUT OF
YOUR ASS AND CALL ME NOW!
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Old 08-15-2019, 06:33 PM   #14
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nothing wrong with challenging the conventions...

Damon Lindelof uses right justification and left justification for texts in one of his specs, looks cool. just like a text. i've even seen a text as a dialogue.

i don't waste lines if i can avoid it.

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TEXT BUBBLES APPEAR: ME: hey dude sup? nothin : HER ME: wanna hook up? go pound sand: HER ME: what’s your problem, Kim this isn’t Kim: HER ME: ...
another thought might be to center them on the page with a new tab setting. i might try that.
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Old 08-15-2019, 07:18 PM   #15
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You can also use it like (OS) or (VO) and write (TEXT) next to character name and maybe put text in Italics.



MAX (TEXT)
Hey what's going on?

CHARLIE (TEXT)
Nothing man... just chilling.
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Old 08-15-2019, 10:48 PM   #16
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nothing wrong with challenging the conventions...

Damon Lindelof uses right justification and left justification for texts in one of his specs, looks cool. just like a text. i've even seen a text as a dialogue.

i don't waste lines if i can avoid it.

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TEXT BUBBLES APPEAR: ME: hey dude sup? nothin : HER ME: wanna hook up? go pound sand: HER ME: whatís your problem, Kim this isnít Kim: HER ME: ...
another thought might be to center them on the page with a new tab setting. i might try that.
I like!

Seems like something I would try (I'm like "wait, why have I not?")

Thinking through my scripts, there's only a one way text then we're on to something else.

But, yeah, this is my first choice if it's a back and forth.
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