Re: Will you consider rating my blcklst hosted script?
I'd change the name; it needs more depth. I'd also add in "frightened" to make the reader feel even more empathy for the bear:
After his beloved 8 year old owner is kidnapped by merciless monsters from the "Shadowlands," a tiny, frightened teddy bear named Fluffy must embark on a dangerous quest to rescue the only boy who's ever loved him.
I'd change the name; it needs more depth. I'd also add in "frightened" to make the reader feel even more empathy for the bear:
After his beloved 8 year old owner is kidnapped by merciless monsters from the "Shadowlands," a tiny, frightened teddy bear named Fluffy must embark on a dangerous quest to rescue the only boy who's ever loved him.
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