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Old 06-13-2012, 05:53 PM   #1
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Hi All!

I'm almost finished with my second screenplay and I was wondering how much swearing is too much. The setting? Vietnam 1968. Just imagine scrungy jungle rats who've been over there way too long.

Any insight would be very much appreciated.

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Old 06-13-2012, 05:59 PM   #2
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Depends on what demographic you're aiming for - family fare or adult; PG or 18 (G or NC-17).

IMO they should be swearing like troopers but each to their own.
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Old 06-13-2012, 06:03 PM   #3
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Thanks for the quick reply.

It's definitely adult. They've sworn more in 75 minutes than I have in my whole life. It's definitely been a challenge with slang, but I figured f*ck was more or less timeless.
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In my last script, 'fuck' was spoken eight times on the opening page alone. If it's required, go for it.
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Old 06-13-2012, 06:39 PM   #5
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this was on television
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LN5eYFH8HZ8
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Old 06-13-2012, 06:53 PM   #7
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The first f-bomb doesn't appear until page five (had to look). Yeah, it's definitely required. I read all my dialog aloud over and over until I get it just right. Do any of you do that, too?

Screenwriting is a whole new beast. It's much easier in some ways than writing a novel, but in other ways, it's a real bitch to get just right.

Forgot about that scene from The Wire. That was an amazing series.
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Old 06-13-2012, 07:38 PM   #8
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Casino has 398 f-bombs. Goodfellas had an even 300. You'll be in good company.

Write dialogue that feels natural. Don't censor yourself at this stage.
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You can definitely overdo the foul language. In my opinion it is better to use a little to set a particular tone, but constant obscenity becomes obnoxious.

Also, consider the practical side. I have seen those movies with constant obscenity that appeared on "regular" TV. It is all just bleeps.
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You can definitely overdo the foul language. In my opinion it is better to use a little to set a particular tone, but constant obscenity becomes obnoxious.

Also, consider the practical side. I have seen those movies with constant obscenity that appeared on "regular" TV. It is all just bleeps.
I disagree. The writer must stay true to the piece and the tone she's setting. Worrying about what one person may possibly think is or TV airing is both not her concern nor her priority. Her only concern and priority is to write the best and most authentic piece she can. Then if it sells and if it gets made, the prods can decide all of these things and, even before these things are considered, what theatrical rating they're going for.

Goodfellas and Casino are good examples and anyone offended by lots of swearing isn't going to be in the target demographic, nor the queue for the film, anyway. The writer must write congruently and consistently. If that's zero swearing - great. If it's lots - great.

As an aside, I find TV censorship in America quite amusing. No idea how you guys cope with it. Over here, once 9 o'clock springs round it's anything goes. And no need for alternate TV versions.
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