Getting good at scene writing as we all know is so important. I am starting this thread for people to practice. Any scene. A stand alone or something from a script.
I'll start. I don't have any screenwriting software at the moment so I'm gonna write a quick scene in the browser.
INT. MARRIAGE COUNSELOR'S OFFICE
DR. RYAN MURPHY, 40s dressed in a nice suit with glasses. He has gray streaks on the sides of his jet black hair. He opens the door.
....DR. MURPHY
Please Come in.
TOM WINTERS, 40s, walks in followed by his wife RACHAEL, 40s. They are amidst a silent argument filled with all the facial expressions and mouth movements but no sound.
.....DR. MURPHY
Ah. Please. Have a seat.
Tom and Rachael sit down in the two chairs in front of the desk in the middle of their silent argument.
.....DR. MURPHY
Hello?
On cue both Tom and Rachael stop and look at Dr. Murphy with a huge smile.
.....DR. MURPHY
Good. Now why don't you tell me what's been going on.
.....TOM
Pretty much if she had a butler, ringing a bell to call for him would be too much work.
.....RACHAEL
Me? Our couch has an imprint of your ass because you never move it from there.
Tom leans in to the doctor.
.....TOM
She lets her arm pit hair grow real long and then saves the trimmings to make a scarf.
Dr. Murphy's face winces.
.....RACHAEL
He urinates by the tree in our backyard. Who does that?
....DR. MURPHY
(dumbfounded)
Not me.
.....TOM
Urine is mostly water! You know what she does? When she's on her period she pulls her tampons out and smells them!
.....DR. MURPHY
Pissing on a tree all of a sudden seems normal.
Rachael looks over at Tom and gives him the stink eye like she can't believe he gave that up. Rachael looks at Dr. Murphy.
.....RACHAEL
All this coming from a man who picks his nose then rolls it in his fingers until it's a nice formed ball and then he flicks onto the rug.
....DR. MURPHY
Now that's disgusting.
....TOM
You're talking to a woman that when she wipes her ass she has to look what is on the toilet paper.
Dr. Murphy's face sours.
.....RACHAEL
He farts into a container because he loves to breathe them in through his mouth.
Dr. Murphy dry heaves.
....TOM
She bites her toe nails and eats the clippings!
....RACHAEL
It's good for your teeth! He---
.....DR. MURPHY
SHUT-UP!!!!!!
Tom and Rachael turn into students in front of the principal. Silent and frozen.
.....DR. MURPHY
You two are the most disgusting, vile people I've ever come across! One thing is for sure. You two deserve each other like no other man and woman on this earth.
Tom and Rachael look at each other. There's a beat then they are lip locked. Passionately kissing. Tom sticks his tongue in her mouth for a long kiss then moves on to her neck.
.....RACHAEL
Did you just breathe in a fart?
.....TOM
(muffled)
Uh-huh.
Dr. Murphy holds his hand to his mouth and runs out of the room.
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I hope people jump in here and take part. We can add comments and remarks to the scene and people can give them another crack. The point is to get in there and practice your way working through a scene.
I'll start. I don't have any screenwriting software at the moment so I'm gonna write a quick scene in the browser.
INT. MARRIAGE COUNSELOR'S OFFICE
DR. RYAN MURPHY, 40s dressed in a nice suit with glasses. He has gray streaks on the sides of his jet black hair. He opens the door.
....DR. MURPHY
Please Come in.
TOM WINTERS, 40s, walks in followed by his wife RACHAEL, 40s. They are amidst a silent argument filled with all the facial expressions and mouth movements but no sound.
.....DR. MURPHY
Ah. Please. Have a seat.
Tom and Rachael sit down in the two chairs in front of the desk in the middle of their silent argument.
.....DR. MURPHY
Hello?
On cue both Tom and Rachael stop and look at Dr. Murphy with a huge smile.
.....DR. MURPHY
Good. Now why don't you tell me what's been going on.
.....TOM
Pretty much if she had a butler, ringing a bell to call for him would be too much work.
.....RACHAEL
Me? Our couch has an imprint of your ass because you never move it from there.
Tom leans in to the doctor.
.....TOM
She lets her arm pit hair grow real long and then saves the trimmings to make a scarf.
Dr. Murphy's face winces.
.....RACHAEL
He urinates by the tree in our backyard. Who does that?
....DR. MURPHY
(dumbfounded)
Not me.
.....TOM
Urine is mostly water! You know what she does? When she's on her period she pulls her tampons out and smells them!
.....DR. MURPHY
Pissing on a tree all of a sudden seems normal.
Rachael looks over at Tom and gives him the stink eye like she can't believe he gave that up. Rachael looks at Dr. Murphy.
.....RACHAEL
All this coming from a man who picks his nose then rolls it in his fingers until it's a nice formed ball and then he flicks onto the rug.
....DR. MURPHY
Now that's disgusting.
....TOM
You're talking to a woman that when she wipes her ass she has to look what is on the toilet paper.
Dr. Murphy's face sours.
.....RACHAEL
He farts into a container because he loves to breathe them in through his mouth.
Dr. Murphy dry heaves.
....TOM
She bites her toe nails and eats the clippings!
....RACHAEL
It's good for your teeth! He---
.....DR. MURPHY
SHUT-UP!!!!!!
Tom and Rachael turn into students in front of the principal. Silent and frozen.
.....DR. MURPHY
You two are the most disgusting, vile people I've ever come across! One thing is for sure. You two deserve each other like no other man and woman on this earth.
Tom and Rachael look at each other. There's a beat then they are lip locked. Passionately kissing. Tom sticks his tongue in her mouth for a long kiss then moves on to her neck.
.....RACHAEL
Did you just breathe in a fart?
.....TOM
(muffled)
Uh-huh.
Dr. Murphy holds his hand to his mouth and runs out of the room.
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I hope people jump in here and take part. We can add comments and remarks to the scene and people can give them another crack. The point is to get in there and practice your way working through a scene.
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