... a scene where person 1 does something and Person 2 watches the action (through a window or whatnot) concurrently.
INT. BAR - NIGHT
RHONDA PEEPLES (40s, looks 60s) grabs the tequilla bottle from the mousey BARTENDER'S hand and chugs it.
EXT. BAR
RON PEEPLES (40s), with red-rimmed eyes and salt and pepper stubble watches her through the window with something between pity and disgust.
INT. BAR
Rhonda burps loudly. Patrons nearby grimace, as the bartender picks up the phone.
EXT. BAR
Ron watches in disbelief as Rhonda snags the phone from the bar tend and begins to repeatedly slug the bartender over the head with it. Ron squeezes his eyes closed as if in pain and rushes inside.
This seems wordy and jarring jumping back and forth to the Person 2 POV, changing the slug, etc. but I'm not sure the best way to do this type of thing.
Appreciate your thoughts.
INT. BAR - NIGHT
RHONDA PEEPLES (40s, looks 60s) grabs the tequilla bottle from the mousey BARTENDER'S hand and chugs it.
EXT. BAR
RON PEEPLES (40s), with red-rimmed eyes and salt and pepper stubble watches her through the window with something between pity and disgust.
INT. BAR
Rhonda burps loudly. Patrons nearby grimace, as the bartender picks up the phone.
EXT. BAR
Ron watches in disbelief as Rhonda snags the phone from the bar tend and begins to repeatedly slug the bartender over the head with it. Ron squeezes his eyes closed as if in pain and rushes inside.
This seems wordy and jarring jumping back and forth to the Person 2 POV, changing the slug, etc. but I'm not sure the best way to do this type of thing.
Appreciate your thoughts.
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