Re: Advice on character reaction description
Jason: I know you asked a specific question about formatting the dialogue for Peter's reaction but, just throwing this out there, I'm wondering ...
Depending on how well it's established, in previous pages, that Peter is certain David is dead, maybe you can shock Peter through action instead of a phone call. .
Maybe Peter catches a glimpse of David in a cab driving by, or in a store. Or out hiking on a trail. Something less static than a phone call from his enemy. Something more threatening to Peter.
Now, I'm not a pro. However, one thing I learned the hard way -- if something I've written keeps nagging at me, no matter how much I try to fix it, it can be a sign to take an entirely different route.
Hope this helps.
Jason: I know you asked a specific question about formatting the dialogue for Peter's reaction but, just throwing this out there, I'm wondering ...
Depending on how well it's established, in previous pages, that Peter is certain David is dead, maybe you can shock Peter through action instead of a phone call. .
Maybe Peter catches a glimpse of David in a cab driving by, or in a store. Or out hiking on a trail. Something less static than a phone call from his enemy. Something more threatening to Peter.
Now, I'm not a pro. However, one thing I learned the hard way -- if something I've written keeps nagging at me, no matter how much I try to fix it, it can be a sign to take an entirely different route.
Hope this helps.
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