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Old 09-02-2018, 03:56 PM   #11
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They're interrogating a witness after a big bust. It happens outside and the whole scene tells exactly who the characters are and sets up how they interact throughout the entire script.

I was hoping to shorten it considerably but nearly all of the dialogue is necessary.

I think maybe walking to the car will accomplish the break.
Good enough.

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Old 09-03-2018, 05:17 AM   #12
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They're interrogating a witness after a big bust. It happens outside and the whole scene tells exactly who the characters are and sets up how they interact throughout the entire script.
What's wrong with this picture?
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Old 09-03-2018, 10:31 AM   #13
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What's wrong with this picture?
If it's a proper "big bust" then the subsequent interrogation would happen formally down at the station, and not outside?
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Old 09-03-2018, 10:33 AM   #14
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It's a comedy and one scene is 10 pages long.

As is, it reads quick and I think hilarious as one continuous scene, but part of me is thinking I have to break it up (even though, honestly I kinda don't want to).
Why do you think that you have to break it up? There's nothing inherently wrong with long scenes. The Oscar winning Birdman (2014) is almost entirely 'one shot', and Hitchcock's celebrated Rope (1948) is a single 'one shot' 'real-time' scene.

Perhaps temporarily cut to an extreme long shot of the scene, and have the dialogue continuous over something ironic occurring in the foreground.
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Old 09-03-2018, 10:46 AM   #15
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What's wrong with this picture?
Show don't ... !

Anyway, these types of posts always generate a lot of responses, but we can't help very much without seeing the scene and the context. Ten pages could be fine, or if the content stinks then one page is too long.
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Old 09-03-2018, 01:44 PM   #16
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Why do you think that you have to break it up? There's nothing inherently wrong with long scenes. The Oscar winning Birdman (2014) is almost entirely 'one shot', and Hitchcock's celebrated Rope (1948) is a single 'one shot' 'real-time' scene.

Perhaps temporarily cut to an extreme long shot of the scene, and have the dialogue continuous over something ironic occurring in the foreground.
I'm thinking I don't anymore. I'm just working on nuancing.

Honestly, all the times I read it it didn't read long. It only became an issue when I thought, "hey, this is 10 pages! Is that too long," hence my post.
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Old 09-03-2018, 01:45 PM   #17
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Show don't ... !

Ten pages could be fine, or if the content stinks then one page is too long.
Agreed.
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Old 09-03-2018, 04:35 PM   #18
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Default Re: Breaking up a long scene

Also checkout the Inglorious Basterds script. https://www.scribd.com/doc/25017184/...nal-Screenplay The opening scene in the farmhouse goes on for 10 pages, is then broken up by a short cut to what is happening in the exterior, then back to the interior of the farmhouse for another seven pages.

A lot of riveting dialogue, some well placed action/suspense, and great acting keeps us engaged.
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Old 09-03-2018, 04:43 PM   #19
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Also checkout the Inglorious Basterds script. https://www.scribd.com/doc/25017184/...nal-Screenplay The opening scene in the farmhouse goes on for 10 pages, is then broken up by a short cut to what is happening in the exterior, then back to the interior of the farmhouse for another seven pages.

A lot of riveting dialogue, some well placed action/suspense, and great acting keeps us engaged.
Thanks. Will check that out!
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