Hard to explain in few words for thread title so here is what I am trying to do:
my two characters are bonding over snacks at the kitchen table in the middle of the night.
I want my next scene to be a shot of the outside of the house showing the two characters talking and laughing in the kitchen window(the only lit room in the entire house).
The scene ends the act 2 mid-climax and the two of them talking/bonding is a big deal. I want to show the outside of the house as a way to signal the break.
Jaws did something like this when the three characters drink at night in the boat, then the next scene is a shot of the boat from the ocean with one room lit at night. The formatting in jaws seems fine, albeit too wordy. Should I just stick with this? Thanks!
this is what jaws did btw:
EXT. OCEAN - NIGHT
Quint has just finished his story, and we are looking across
the quiet night sea to the Orca slowly circling in the night,
the warm light in the pilot house barely revealing the figures
of the three men inside, the red and green running lights
winking along the ship's flanks. We hear the distant boom
and drawn-out hoot of a whale.
my two characters are bonding over snacks at the kitchen table in the middle of the night.
I want my next scene to be a shot of the outside of the house showing the two characters talking and laughing in the kitchen window(the only lit room in the entire house).
The scene ends the act 2 mid-climax and the two of them talking/bonding is a big deal. I want to show the outside of the house as a way to signal the break.
Jaws did something like this when the three characters drink at night in the boat, then the next scene is a shot of the boat from the ocean with one room lit at night. The formatting in jaws seems fine, albeit too wordy. Should I just stick with this? Thanks!
this is what jaws did btw:
EXT. OCEAN - NIGHT
Quint has just finished his story, and we are looking across
the quiet night sea to the Orca slowly circling in the night,
the warm light in the pilot house barely revealing the figures
of the three men inside, the red and green running lights
winking along the ship's flanks. We hear the distant boom
and drawn-out hoot of a whale.
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