hello all:
i have a scene in my script that i flashback to at the end of the script which provides a revelation to the hero. it's sort of like a play on The Sixth Sense where we flashback and see the scenes in a new way, a new light, right?
the first time we see the scene the subtext is not revealed.
when we flashback to that scene, the parenthetical will now be subtitles ON SCREEN, and it will reveal the subtext of each character in the parenthetical as they speak their line. it might not need the subtitle, but i don't want it to be lost on the reader/audience.
the key to the revelation that the hero thinks she and her mother are saying the same thing, but she realizes when we flash back, they aren't.
Annie Hall does it in a line of action like so:
Anne's thoughts pop on screen: He probably thinks i'm a yo-yo.
which do you think is clearer? it's a phone conversation, so we only see one person on screen.
i have a scene in my script that i flashback to at the end of the script which provides a revelation to the hero. it's sort of like a play on The Sixth Sense where we flashback and see the scenes in a new way, a new light, right?
the first time we see the scene the subtext is not revealed.
when we flashback to that scene, the parenthetical will now be subtitles ON SCREEN, and it will reveal the subtext of each character in the parenthetical as they speak their line. it might not need the subtitle, but i don't want it to be lost on the reader/audience.
the key to the revelation that the hero thinks she and her mother are saying the same thing, but she realizes when we flash back, they aren't.
Annie Hall does it in a line of action like so:
Anne's thoughts pop on screen: He probably thinks i'm a yo-yo.
which do you think is clearer? it's a phone conversation, so we only see one person on screen.
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