hi all,
just got feedback on my script, my girlfriend pointed out three major problems she had with it.
i'm now unsure and want your opinions. the script is dark and very twisted.
problem one - one of the characters kills his wife in a heated argument, his two kids witness the incident. he dosen't love his family and fearing he'll lose everything (professionally) he locks the two kids and the corpse in a bedroom and torches the house. is this too much?
problem two - the character's brother, and business partner, finds out that his wife has had an affair with said character, that she is pregnant with his child and throws her over a cliff. is this too much?
problem three - the script builds and builds (i hope!) until we reach the final scene... which is basically a 'who does it' situation. the screen freezes and a poem is read as a V.O. it lasts for just under a minute.. 57 seconds to be exact. is this too much? will the audience accept it or should a cut it by a verse or two... or three?
thanks. need some input before i decide what to do.
just got feedback on my script, my girlfriend pointed out three major problems she had with it.
i'm now unsure and want your opinions. the script is dark and very twisted.
problem one - one of the characters kills his wife in a heated argument, his two kids witness the incident. he dosen't love his family and fearing he'll lose everything (professionally) he locks the two kids and the corpse in a bedroom and torches the house. is this too much?
problem two - the character's brother, and business partner, finds out that his wife has had an affair with said character, that she is pregnant with his child and throws her over a cliff. is this too much?
problem three - the script builds and builds (i hope!) until we reach the final scene... which is basically a 'who does it' situation. the screen freezes and a poem is read as a V.O. it lasts for just under a minute.. 57 seconds to be exact. is this too much? will the audience accept it or should a cut it by a verse or two... or three?
thanks. need some input before i decide what to do.
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