I sometimes end scenes with a setup for a punchline, and the punchline is the first dialogue in the next scene. And when I do that, it often reads better (to me) if, in the second scene, I put the first action text after the dialogue/punchline. For example (I just wrote the following to post here) -
Versus the standard formatting...
Anyone bothered or confused by the formatting of the first version? Anyone seen pro scripts that use the first version/style?
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[B] INT. KITCHEN - DAY[/B] JACK (35) chopping up veggies, JOE (35) at the kitchen table. JACK Joe -- guaranteed, Jane will love it! [B]INT. HEALTH CLUB - DAY[/B] JANE (to her phone) Sure, Joe. And then, on Monday -- I'll file for divorce. JANE (35), on a bench, sweaty from her workout.
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[B] INT. KITCHEN - DAY[/B] JACK (35) chopping up veggies, JOE (35) at the kitchen table. JACK Joe -- guaranteed, Jane will love it! [B] INT. HEALTH CLUB - DAY[/B] JANE (35), on a bench, sweaty from her workout. JANE (to her phone) Sure, Joe. And then, on Monday -- I'll file for divorce.
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