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Old 01-12-2018, 02:47 PM   #1
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Default How do you signify a short break between two different shots?

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INT. BEDROOM -- NIGHT Vader awakes. He gets out of bed. INT. LANDING -- A BIT LATER We hear the toilet door flush. Vader emerges from the bathroom.
The two shots belong to the same sequence but they're not quite continuous as obviously a short amount of time has elapsed. What's the accepted way of writing the second slug?
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Old 01-12-2018, 05:07 PM   #2
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Default Re: How do you signify a short break between two different shots?

You're right, it's not "CONTINUOUS"

Personally, I write it in the scene slugline as "(LATER)", but in this case you'd get away with doing nothing, in my books. The "He gets out of bed" logically sets up the next action/scene. Unless he's had to spend some inordinate amount of time in the bathroom - say he's developing a case of cholera or something - I'd just not worry about it.
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Old 01-12-2018, 07:23 PM   #3
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INT. BEDROOM -- NIGHT Vader awakes. He gets out of bed. INT. LANDING -- A BIT LATER We hear the toilet door flush. Vader emerges from the bathroom.
The two shots belong to the same sequence but they're not quite continuous as obviously a short amount of time has elapsed. What's the accepted way of writing the second slug?
If they're different locations, i wouldn't indicate the time shift in the slugline but in the scene description. But the scene as you're writing it here doesn't feel like it even needs to call that shift out. this feels like just normal time passing from one cut to the next. the viewer will get that Vader went to the bathroom after getting out of bed, and then emerging post-whatever in the bathroom
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Old 01-13-2018, 07:10 PM   #4
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Default Re: How do you signify a short break between two different shots?

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INT. BEDROOM -- NIGHT Vader awakes. He gets out of bed. INT. LANDING -- A BIT LATER We hear the toilet door flush. Vader emerges from the bathroom.
The two shots belong to the same sequence but they're not quite continuous as obviously a short amount of time has elapsed. What's the accepted way of writing the second slug?
"MINUTES LATER" or "MOMENTS LATER" depending on the amount of time. I don't know if that's the right way to do it or not, but it's the way I would do it.
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Old 01-14-2018, 11:29 AM   #5
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INT. LANDING -- NIGHT

... regardless of the amount of time that has passed.
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Old 01-14-2018, 04:40 PM   #6
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INT. LANDING -- NIGHT

... regardless of the amount of time that has passed.
I'm guessing that's technically right and that's the way it would definitely be if it was a shooting script ... but for a reading script I see, "MOMENTS LATER" or "MINUTES LATER" as "shorthand" that could keep you from having to write unnecessary description. At least that's the way I look at it.
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Old 01-14-2018, 06:34 PM   #7
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I like the way David Trottier suggests to do it. (Just an opinion.)

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Master scenes and secondary scenes revisited
Let’s go to another example. As you know, you begin a scene with a master scene heading, which names the master (or primary) location; for example, EXT. SMITH HOUSE - DAY. Other locations (such as BEDROOM or HALLWAY) that are part of the master location are called secondary locations; the resulting heading is called a secondary scene heading.

In addition, it’s okay to add a secondary location to a master (primary) location in a master scene heading. I’ll illustrate all of these points below.

First, we’ll begin with the master scene heading that includes a secondary location and then move to other secondary locations.
INT. SMITH HOUSE – LIVING ROOM – DAY

John slams the front door and races down the

HALLWAY

and into his

BEDROOM

where he dives on top of his bed and sobs.

The above is correct, but it could have just as easily been written like this, which is also correct:

INT. SMITH HOUSE – DAY

LIVING ROOM

John slams the front door and races out.

HALLWAY

He runs past pictures of his family.

IN THE BEDROOM

He stumbles in and falls on his bed sobbing.

As you can see, any number of secondary headings can follow as long as the locations are part of the master (primary) location. Once we change the camera placement to an exterior location or to a location that is not part of the master location, we must create a new master scene heading.
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I only use slug lines within a scene if I'm bouncing around within a large locale, INT or EXT.

Example: The scene heading is supposed to tell us the main location, eg. INT. AUDITORIUM, and the time - NIGHT. But +the slugs that I might use are REFRESHMENT BAR, SALAD TABLE, CONFERENCE TABLE, EXIT or ENTRANCE DOOR, or PODIUM. But the overall shooting and set-up location is the INT. AUDITORIUM - NIGHT.

Thus, I'm not too fond of the Trottier sample here. Yes, it does avoid dealing with the time of day in each location, because it's only in the scene heading, INT. LIVINGROOM, but the slugs bounce around all over the house, way out of range of the livingroom.

Since this is all continuous, you could use SERIES OF SHOTS; oops, another can of worms.
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Old 01-15-2018, 01:09 PM   #9
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I'm guessing that's technically right and that's the way it would definitely be if it was a shooting script ... but for a reading script I see, "MOMENTS LATER" or "MINUTES LATER" as "shorthand" that could keep you from having to write unnecessary description. At least that's the way I look at it.
It doesn’t go without saying. There are no shortcuts.

The movie audience doesn’t see “MOMENTS LATER” in the script. If it’s necessary to the story for the audience to get a sense of the passage of time, the clue needs to be in the Action.

The reader and audience will figure it out.
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I like the way David Trottier suggests to do it. (Just an opinion.)

I like that a lot--it's clean and your reader gets the point without wasting a lot of ink.
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