Need your opinion on whether the format below is ok. Wasn't able to find a script with this scenario but if you know of one, please post here. I looked at the other flashback thread further below but wasn't quite sure if that was appropriate here also. They suggested using an "End of Flashback" each time. Would that be needed here too?
Set-up -- a couple is relocating to Vegas. They are heading to their hotel from the airport.
My objective -- Use various flashbacks with the protag/Karen using V.O. to inform us of what she is seeing now outside of the taxi and what did happen in the past via the flashbacks. The backstory.
Is my formatting correct with the "Flashback," "V.O." and "Present Day" notations?
Do I need an "action" line after each Flashback dialogue e.g. "Karen keeps her head down playing with her food?"
Is the "Karen's P.O.V. from car window" correct?
Also, if there is a better/more interesting way of accomplishing getting this info out, please do tell.
EXT. LAS VEGAS STRIP - MORNING
A TAXI drives down the Strip past glamorous casinos.
INT. TAXI - MORNING
KAREN JONES, 28, stares out the window at the hordes of tourists on the sidewalk.
KAREN (V.O.)
Hard to believe that just 2 weeks ago, I was told that I was getting promoted to our company's HQ in Vegas.
I was thrilled. My parents were not.
INT. JONES LIVING ROOM - NIGHT - FLASHBACK
Karen and her parents are arguing over dinner.
MRS. JONES
Are you crazy? People visit there, they don't live there.
Karen keeps her head down playing with her food.
INT. TAXI - MORNING - PRESENT DAY
Karen's P.O.V. from car window - the doors to the casinos are all open.
KAREN (V.O.)
It's 90 degrees out. Don't all the open doors let the AC escape?
She looks over to her sleeping BOYFRIEND.
KAREN (V.O.) (CONT'D)
He can sleep through anything.
At least my brother was thrilled at us moving out here.
EXT. JONES BACKYARD - DAY - FLASHBACK
Karen's BROTHER hands her some money.
BROTHER
At some casino, put this on the Cowboys to win the Super Bowl this season. Please.
INT. TAXI - MORNING - PRESENT DAY
The taxi pulls up to the Mirage Hotel.
KAREN (V.O.)
(stares up at the hotel)
Wow. That place can probably hold everyone in our town.
She shakes her Boyfriend.
KAREN (CONT'D)
Hey, wake up. We're here.
Much, much appreciation for any assistance here.
Set-up -- a couple is relocating to Vegas. They are heading to their hotel from the airport.
My objective -- Use various flashbacks with the protag/Karen using V.O. to inform us of what she is seeing now outside of the taxi and what did happen in the past via the flashbacks. The backstory.
Is my formatting correct with the "Flashback," "V.O." and "Present Day" notations?
Do I need an "action" line after each Flashback dialogue e.g. "Karen keeps her head down playing with her food?"
Is the "Karen's P.O.V. from car window" correct?
Also, if there is a better/more interesting way of accomplishing getting this info out, please do tell.
EXT. LAS VEGAS STRIP - MORNING
A TAXI drives down the Strip past glamorous casinos.
INT. TAXI - MORNING
KAREN JONES, 28, stares out the window at the hordes of tourists on the sidewalk.
KAREN (V.O.)
Hard to believe that just 2 weeks ago, I was told that I was getting promoted to our company's HQ in Vegas.
I was thrilled. My parents were not.
INT. JONES LIVING ROOM - NIGHT - FLASHBACK
Karen and her parents are arguing over dinner.
MRS. JONES
Are you crazy? People visit there, they don't live there.
Karen keeps her head down playing with her food.
INT. TAXI - MORNING - PRESENT DAY
Karen's P.O.V. from car window - the doors to the casinos are all open.
KAREN (V.O.)
It's 90 degrees out. Don't all the open doors let the AC escape?
She looks over to her sleeping BOYFRIEND.
KAREN (V.O.) (CONT'D)
He can sleep through anything.
At least my brother was thrilled at us moving out here.
EXT. JONES BACKYARD - DAY - FLASHBACK
Karen's BROTHER hands her some money.
BROTHER
At some casino, put this on the Cowboys to win the Super Bowl this season. Please.
INT. TAXI - MORNING - PRESENT DAY
The taxi pulls up to the Mirage Hotel.
KAREN (V.O.)
(stares up at the hotel)
Wow. That place can probably hold everyone in our town.
She shakes her Boyfriend.
KAREN (CONT'D)
Hey, wake up. We're here.
Much, much appreciation for any assistance here.
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