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Old 08-24-2009, 12:20 AM   #11
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The story is the story - so look to your character and the situiation they are in, and your theme, for the answers. I have a script with a man who knows he will die soon, and the reason why has everything to do with the story - because this is the event that kicks off the story.

You don't want to force something onto the story, you want it to grow naturally.

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Old 08-24-2009, 12:43 AM   #12
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Bingo!

I have it!
Thank you gentlemen.
Well, damn... I was gonna suggest Ebola.
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Old 08-24-2009, 01:56 AM   #13
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He could take one of those "When will you die" facebook thingies
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Old 08-24-2009, 10:16 AM   #14
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The protagonist discovered an accounting irregularity and innocently sent an email about it to management but they are out of town on a communications-free seminar and retreat so none will get it for three days. Shortly after sending it, he/she realizes that the management are the ones doing the dirty stuff, work for some seriously bad people, and when they get that mail, they will have the accountant murdered.

Oh no! Now he/she has to either stop the mail from getting to anyone. Recall never works. Seduce or otherwise morally compromise the email admin into removing the message? Destroy the company mail servers and tape back-ups? Gather more evidence, go to the authorities and get the family to safety? What to do?

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Maybe the hitman doesn't like to fly & is taking the bus.
Actually, that sounds like a really good comedy. A really paranoid delusional guy wins a video game sweepstakes and the grand prize is to be delivered by John Madden himself. Only problem is, someone's idle semi-death threat online gets garbled with a mail message about the impending visit in a computer crash and the poor guy thinks Madden is coming to kill him. By bus.
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Old 08-24-2009, 11:31 PM   #15
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My question would be is he going to die or does he think he's going to die... that opens a whole new range of possibilities

edit.... okay if he is going to die... he has just stolen some money (accidentally?) from Mr X. he knows that in three days Mr X will discover this transgression and come after him
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Old 08-25-2009, 12:23 AM   #16
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My question would be is he going to die or does he think he's going to die... that opens a whole new range of possibilities

edit.... okay if he is going to die... he has just stolen some money (accidentally?) from Mr X. he knows that in three days Mr X will discover this transgression and come after him
"Thinks he's going to die..."

God, there it is.
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Old 08-25-2009, 06:38 PM   #17
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Severe radiation poisoning? Ebola?
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Old 08-27-2009, 03:22 AM   #18
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There are more ways to create tension than with a ticking bomb device.

I'm not a big fan of it, as it limits the story with its time frame.

I also don't like it so much as it's mostly connected to a single task: will Mr. Hero be able to get to the bomb before the red jello and the black jello mix?

Stories are more gripping if you have no idea what's coming next.

The ticking bomb device is only good for certain stories.

OP, is your story one of these?

Or are you trying to shoot your story up with artificial tension?

Develop the excitement out of your story, its characters and their immediate problems. Otherwise it will look frankensteined together.
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