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Old 04-06-2004, 10:21 PM   #1
camp munich
 
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Default (beat) or elipses (...) for a pause in dialogue??

does it matter? see the second to last line.

NATALIA
(whispering)
It’s just me, Natalia.
ADAMS
I can see that.
NATALIA
I am sorry for sneaking up on you.
ADAMS
That’s alright. What’s going on?
NATALIA
I remembered what I wanted to ask you.
ADAMS
You did? What is it?
NATALIA
I wanted to ask you ... if I could join you in there?
ADAMS
Hmm, I think so. I think there is room.


THANKS I AM LEARNING A LOT ON THIS BOARD!!!!!!!

-CM (working on first script)
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Old 04-07-2004, 07:42 AM   #2
scripter1
 
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Default Elipses

(beat) is outdated and interupts the flow.
The way you've got it is just fine.
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Old 04-07-2004, 08:48 AM   #3
camp munich
 
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Default THANKS ... what about in action sequences?

do you still say "(beat)" or simply say that the character pauses for a moment...

-Cm
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Old 04-07-2004, 09:49 AM   #4
Deus Ex Machine
 
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Default Re: THANKS ... what about in action sequences?

Not far down the page is the same topic.

b3.ezboard.com/fdonedealfrm23.showMessage?topicID=1722.topic
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Old 04-08-2004, 07:34 AM   #5
scripter1
 
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Default Just use the elipse

you don't need to include anything else to indicate a pause in speech.

NOW, if there is a big pause in the scene, like an awkward silence then you would write,

Awkward silence.
Or give your characters something to do like fidget or look around nervous or embarrassed, etc.
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Old 04-08-2004, 05:38 PM   #6
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Default

Reading recently produced scripts, obviously by established writers, I find both are still in use. And, many times, within the same script.

My take is: An ellipse is used as a hesitation in dialog. A beat is an intentional silent pause in dialog or action.

So, I use both. Go figure.
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Old 04-10-2004, 07:38 AM   #7
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Default

NATALIA
(whispering)
It’s just me.

ADAMS
I can see that.

NATALIA
Sorry for sneaking up on you.

ADAMS
What’s going on?

NATALIA
I remembered what I wanted to ask you.

ADAMS
Yeah?

NATALIA
I wanted to ask...could I join you in there?

ADAMS
Hmm, I think there's room.

I kept looking at your dialog and played with it a bit.
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