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Old 09-28-2011, 03:35 PM   #21
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Old 09-28-2011, 03:48 PM   #22
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If we're all dead the use of "we see" won't make any sense.
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Old 09-28-2011, 03:55 PM   #23
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INT. INTERNET - DAY

We see bodies - our own. How did this happen? We are bloody and beaten and dead.

We see JEFF LOWELL, once a warm and fuzzy bunny of a man, now a crazed tiger released from his cage, all gnashing teeth and red eyes. We see his hands, covered in blood, and his butcher knife, dripping unknown bodily fluids on our twitching corpses.

JEFF
I told you guys, it doesn't f*cking matter!

FADE OUT
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Old 09-28-2011, 03:58 PM   #24
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Engaging in a "we see" debate is liker suicide by cop, only with screenwriters.
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Old 09-28-2011, 04:19 PM   #25
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OUTER SPACE - A SEA OF STARS Stars twinkle. Strangely, a small circle of them disappears, then this circle of darkness grows until... We see there's a massive asteroid flying towards us. The asteroid fills our view then just passes by and we tilt down to see The red planet Mars rise into view.
You know, if I read this, I wouldn't batter an eyelid at the "we see", my only concern would be trying to understand what I'm supposed to be seeing without being disoriented. Removing the "we see" wouldn't improve that.

However...

If I saw read this on a "we see" thread on a screenwriting forum, I'd be like, "Nah, you don't need the 'we see'."
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Old 09-28-2011, 04:55 PM   #26
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Old 09-28-2011, 05:07 PM   #27
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You can only use "we smell" in novels and John Waters movies.
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Old 09-28-2011, 06:02 PM   #28
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Old 09-28-2011, 06:10 PM   #29
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(I think cshel's seems almost deliberately undramatic.)
Deliberately undramatic?! Well I never! In-deed! and Hmmpf! I was just trying to toss out an example...

How about:

INNER SPACE

WE SEE, HEAR, SMELL, TASTE, TOUCH, and INTUIT--

A vast and endless sea of Done Dealers--

SUDDENLY - A GINORMOUS MOTHERFVCKING ASTEROID comes SCREAMING out of the cosmos heading straight at US until it fills the entire computer screen--

No matter how much WE TILT, PAN, DOLLY, PULL BACK, FISH EYE, or hit the ESCAPE key--

The ASTEROID SMASHES through our computer screens and PULVERIZES US into OBLIVION - BUT--

In the split NANOSECOND before OBLITERATION--

WE SEE that the asteroid is actually JEFF LOWELL!

The microscopic brain matter of a bazillion Done Dealers EXPLODES into OUTER SPACE, then--

PLUMMETS back down to Earth somewhere near Christmas Island
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Old 09-28-2011, 06:55 PM   #30
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I get that an action statement can start with "we see". But when the next statement doesn't start with "we see" I'm confused about whether or not we're supposed to see it.

To help with any confusion I usually do something like:

We see Bob walk and sit at the table. We don't see the bomb under the table.

If I were to have something without a "we ..." like:

The utensils are arranged in Morse Code.

... I let the reader decide if they want to see it or not.
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