How much is too much

Collapse

Announcement

Collapse
No announcement yet.
X
 
  • Filter
  • Time
  • Show
Clear All
new posts

  • wks2001
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Like someone here said, use it when it fits, either the character, or the situation. Try not to use it just to manipulate an emotion... and make it fit the person who has been using it all along. Not the characters who up until this point have never cussed in their life - make it believable.

    Leave a comment:


  • christopher jon
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Originally posted by SusanTF View Post
    I did see Platoon back in the day of VHS, and read the script not too long ago.

    I have to say all my characters are quite diverse. That's what I've spent the most time on, but that's not to say they don't have potty-mouths (one guy doesn't.)
    It's all good. It's your story, do whatcha gotta do.

    Leave a comment:


  • SundownInRetreat
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Originally posted by SusanTF View Post
    It should be...poetic.
    Got bit.
    Fever hit.
    World gone to shit.
    Might as well quit.

    Leave a comment:


  • SusanTF
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Originally posted by Hasil Adkins View Post
    Stressing this.

    Doesn't really matter how much profanity you use, it's how you use it. A litany of fucks and shits will be as boring and off-putting as any form of stilted dialogue. But put to good use, cursing can be like music.

    Or as Clay Davis put it: Major crimes? Shit...
    I've been reading everything aloud, and if it doesn't sound right, it gets changed. I definitely hear what your saying. It should be...poetic.

    Leave a comment:


  • Hasil Adkins
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Originally posted by BattleDolphinZero View Post
    My standard is A) if it "lands" -- meaning it makes a line funny or punchy or threatening or whatever, B) if it is absolutely necessary to make a line flow -- if no other word will fit in there as naturally.
    Stressing this.

    Doesn't really matter how much profanity you use, it's how you use it. A litany of fucks and shits will be as boring and off-putting as any form of stilted dialogue. But put to good use, cursing can be like music.

    Or as Clay Davis put it: Major crimes? Shit...

    Leave a comment:


  • SusanTF
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Originally posted by christopher jon View Post
    Watch platoon. Oliver Stone did some time in Nam. It's a good example of character diversity.

    I believe Vietnam was the land of me love you long time.
    I did see Platoon back in the day of VHS, and read the script not too long ago.

    I have to say all my characters are quite diverse. That's what I've spent the most time on, but that's not to say they don't have potty-mouths (one guy doesn't.)

    Leave a comment:


  • christopher jon
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    From what I've read, Vietnam wasn't the Land O' Rainbows and Cinnamon Buns.
    Watch platoon. Oliver Stone did some time in Nam. It's a good example of character diversity.

    I believe Vietnam was the land of me love you long time.

    Leave a comment:


  • SusanTF
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Originally posted by christopher jon View Post
    Why so much vulgarity?

    Does every character have the same voice?

    Remember, the military is a melting pot. Treat your soldiers accordingly. It'll make them more interesting.
    From what I've read, Vietnam wasn't the Land O' Rainbows and Cinnamon Buns. I took the weekend to go over the lines, and I noticed the level of swearing was on par with heightened tension in each of the scenes.

    As far as Deadwood goes, haven't seen more than a couple of episodes. I just couldn't get into it like my husband did.

    I definitely will just f****** write the son-of-a-b****.

    Thanks for all your feedback.

    Leave a comment:


  • christopher jon
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Originally posted by haroldhecuba View Post
    This ****ing thread is too ****ing much. Write the mother****** the way you want to ****ing write it, and if that includes ****ing swearing, then include the ****ing swearing. Don't worry about all this ****, and especially don't worry about these mother******s here.

    HH
    You forgot about the mother ****ing snakes on the mother ****ing plane.

    Leave a comment:


  • Richmond Weems
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    This ****ing thread is too ****ing much. Write the mother****** the way you want to ****ing write it, and if that includes ****ing swearing, then include the ****ing swearing. Don't worry about all this ****, and especially don't worry about these mother******s here.

    HH

    Leave a comment:


  • Midnite
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Originally posted by emily blake View Post
    I've dated some military folk. I have yet to meet one who didn't cuss in every sentence.
    Are you sure they weren't simply repeating what you had just said to prove how attentive they were being?

    Midnite

    Leave a comment:


  • emily blake
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    I've dated some military folk. I have yet to meet one who didn't cuss in every sentence.

    Leave a comment:


  • BattleDolphinZero
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Here's what I do...

    I write it freely. Then on each pass I cut the word out as often as possible. My standard is A) if it "lands" -- meaning it makes a line funny or punchy or threatening or whatever, B) if it is absolutely necessary to make a line flow -- if no other word will fit in there as naturally.

    Leave a comment:


  • ChadStrohl
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Originally posted by christopher jon View Post
    Why so much vulgarity?

    Does every character have the same voice?

    Remember, the military is a melting pot. Treat your soldiers accordingly. It'll make them more interesting.
    Like Deadwood.

    Every other word from Al Swerengen's mouth was a swear. He'd ramble on and on presumably to hear himself talk.

    Seth Bullock spoke with control, at minimum, without a single swear, but his delivery carried far more weight.

    Al was frightening, but Seth was scary.

    Leave a comment:


  • christopher jon
    replied
    Re: How much is too much

    Just imagine scrungy jungle rats who've been over there way too long.
    Why so much vulgarity?

    Does every character have the same voice?

    Remember, the military is a melting pot. Treat your soldiers accordingly. It'll make them more interesting.

    Leave a comment:

Working...
X