I have this set of dialogue which I am writing which consist of being too passive... does it matter in scripts if dialogue is 'passive' not to write it as such. For example; I have two character talking.
One said, "Alyson was famously known as the deadliest pirate in the seven seas. She had a nickname, Tia Doña. A true legend ...she'd killed her paramours while they were still asleep!"
Now, according to the grammar rules, Alyson was famously known... is too passive? Would anyone agree?
One said, "Alyson was famously known as the deadliest pirate in the seven seas. She had a nickname, Tia Doña. A true legend ...she'd killed her paramours while they were still asleep!"
Now, according to the grammar rules, Alyson was famously known... is too passive? Would anyone agree?
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