Man, my SP's getting creamed on Triggerstreet. In the script, I join a pair of newlyweds in progress, on their honeymoon. Melvin's a milquetoast mechanical engineer and Belle's an older bombshell slut. 5 out of 6 readers ask "Why would Belle marry Melvin?" They can't get past it.
I didn't think I had to justify this, but I did glance over it near the start when Ally, Belle's neighbor and confidante, asks her why she cheats:
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ALLISON
I don't understand you, Belle. Don't you love your husband?
BELLE
Of course I do. Melvin's so smart, and stable, and considerate ... and he loves me, Ally. He really does. I know because he tells me so.
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I seem to remember back in the 90's when there was a feminist movement to reject physical attributes and attract a more sensible, successful mate.
I think one makeup ad back then showed a glamourous woman walking past some snazzily dressed stud in a lounge and taking the arm of a slight, bespectacled man. The ad summed everything up with a curt "Grow up."
I was pretty much counting on that attitude to carry me into the script without having to address the characters' courtship. Did this movement fizzle out entirely? How out of touch am I?
I didn't think I had to justify this, but I did glance over it near the start when Ally, Belle's neighbor and confidante, asks her why she cheats:
***
ALLISON
I don't understand you, Belle. Don't you love your husband?
BELLE
Of course I do. Melvin's so smart, and stable, and considerate ... and he loves me, Ally. He really does. I know because he tells me so.
***
I seem to remember back in the 90's when there was a feminist movement to reject physical attributes and attract a more sensible, successful mate.
I think one makeup ad back then showed a glamourous woman walking past some snazzily dressed stud in a lounge and taking the arm of a slight, bespectacled man. The ad summed everything up with a curt "Grow up."
I was pretty much counting on that attitude to carry me into the script without having to address the characters' courtship. Did this movement fizzle out entirely? How out of touch am I?
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