Greetings,
I would like some input as to the best way to format a scene.
I have my military officer in a NORAD like setting, watching nuclear war break out. He's stoic, solid, a rock of stability and duty to his troops.
In his quarters is a photo of his young family. In an earlier scene we saw him gently run his fingers down his wife's face. He knows the world's in danger and inside he is deeply worried about his family.
When war breaks out, he stands firm in the wake of vast destruction.
He witnesses his home destroyed. Still firm. Only a flicker of an eyelid. In his mind, though, we see the photo in his quarters. It is incinerated in a blast of flame.
On the outside, he is unmoved.
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Should I just change scenes with something like,
Through character's mind's eye we see...
INT. CHARACTER'S QUARTERS - DAY
The family photo on the desk. Smiling faces. The caption, "Missing you Daddy!!"
A BLAST of flame. The photo, the smiles, the caption...Ash.
INT. WAR ROOM - DAY
Character monitors the destruction of his world.
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This wording is just to give an idea of what I'm working with.
Any suggestions?
Thanks,
Outback
I would like some input as to the best way to format a scene.
I have my military officer in a NORAD like setting, watching nuclear war break out. He's stoic, solid, a rock of stability and duty to his troops.
In his quarters is a photo of his young family. In an earlier scene we saw him gently run his fingers down his wife's face. He knows the world's in danger and inside he is deeply worried about his family.
When war breaks out, he stands firm in the wake of vast destruction.
He witnesses his home destroyed. Still firm. Only a flicker of an eyelid. In his mind, though, we see the photo in his quarters. It is incinerated in a blast of flame.
On the outside, he is unmoved.
__________________________________
Should I just change scenes with something like,
Through character's mind's eye we see...
INT. CHARACTER'S QUARTERS - DAY
The family photo on the desk. Smiling faces. The caption, "Missing you Daddy!!"
A BLAST of flame. The photo, the smiles, the caption...Ash.
INT. WAR ROOM - DAY
Character monitors the destruction of his world.
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This wording is just to give an idea of what I'm working with.
Any suggestions?
Thanks,
Outback
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