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Wow! This is fantastic!
Don't know if it means any more than it is, but this is what one reviewer on screenwritersutopia.com script(www.screenwritersutopia.com/modules.php?name=ScriptSwap&op=viewScript&sid=59) swap said;
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Sci-Fi / Suspense
X-STREAM by WritePro
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Logline: When a group of genius brats develop an X-Stream to another dimension, they find it the real world and Earth just an experiment... about to end. Unless they make the world aware and defeat the carnivourous plant people who want the earth as its personal smorgasborg.
Pages: 98
File Format: Rich Text File (RTF)
Average Score: 74
Review Averages:
Premise Characterization Story Dialogue Format
Excellent Average Excellent Excellent Acceptable
Reviewer: Jelena
Overall Stars:http://www.screenwritersutopia.com/i...wap/4stars.gif
Premise: Excellent
Story: Excellent
Characterization: Average
Dialogue: Excellent
Critique:
My review: I felt like watching "Second hands lions" without sad part of the story.
Enthusiasm and energy of kids are rubbing onto you. Your dialogs are excellent. I liked their smarts and "deliquensy", I liked litle platonic love moments, magic of walking through walls, getting fat and skiny like in cartoons. But I alsop like that they brought the system down. I deeply believe that this script is extremely marketable, if you get machinery behind you and good marketing kids will drag parents into the theaters.
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Wonderful, but I still think it needs another rewrite. Want to expand on that "love relationship" between the two teenagers.
Anyway, thought you might want to see what ONE person thought.
Bobby
"Write long... and write well."
Don't know if it means any more than it is, but this is what one reviewer on screenwritersutopia.com script(www.screenwritersutopia.com/modules.php?name=ScriptSwap&op=viewScript&sid=59) swap said;
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Sci-Fi / Suspense
X-STREAM by WritePro
[ Read | Review ]
Logline: When a group of genius brats develop an X-Stream to another dimension, they find it the real world and Earth just an experiment... about to end. Unless they make the world aware and defeat the carnivourous plant people who want the earth as its personal smorgasborg.
Pages: 98
File Format: Rich Text File (RTF)
Average Score: 74
Review Averages:
Premise Characterization Story Dialogue Format
Excellent Average Excellent Excellent Acceptable
Reviewer: Jelena
Overall Stars:http://www.screenwritersutopia.com/i...wap/4stars.gif
Premise: Excellent
Story: Excellent
Characterization: Average
Dialogue: Excellent
Critique:
My review: I felt like watching "Second hands lions" without sad part of the story.
Enthusiasm and energy of kids are rubbing onto you. Your dialogs are excellent. I liked their smarts and "deliquensy", I liked litle platonic love moments, magic of walking through walls, getting fat and skiny like in cartoons. But I alsop like that they brought the system down. I deeply believe that this script is extremely marketable, if you get machinery behind you and good marketing kids will drag parents into the theaters.
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Wonderful, but I still think it needs another rewrite. Want to expand on that "love relationship" between the two teenagers.
Anyway, thought you might want to see what ONE person thought.
Bobby
"Write long... and write well."
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