I would very much like your opinon on something - I extracted this scene from a movie I watched recently - could you rate
the dialogue on a scale of 1-10. [1= Ed Woods 10= John Steinbeck]
Thank you
INT. CAFE X - DAY
WAITRESS
You gotta problem with something?
ALEX
I want service.
WAITRESS
No. You're late for lunch.
ALEX
Did you hear me say I lunch? I want a cup of coffee, an' maybe a plate of biscuits.
WAITRESS
Will you go to one of the other tables laid for tea, please?
ALEX
No, this table suits me just fine. Thank you.
The waitress walks away, superior and disapproving.
WAITRESS
(to herself)
Suit your self. Bastard.
ALEX
Well?
WAITRESS
The waitress serving your table will be here in a minute.
Again he inserts his hand under the tablecloth. Nothing. The card is gone!
SUE (O.S.)
Was it coffee you wanted, sir?
ALEX
I gave the order once.
SUE
I'm really sorry. There's been such a rush today. And it's my first day, an' I'm still learning the robes, so if you just bare with me. Have you lost something?
He withdrew his hand, watching her with dangerous and unsympathetic eyes. His cheek twitches from nerves.
SUE (CONT'D)
I'll have to change the cloth again for tea, so if you've lost something...
And like that, she clears the table of it's accessories, then nips together the corners of the tablecloth and lifts it in one movement from the table, crumbs and all.
SUE (CONT'D)
... there's nothing there, sir.
ALEX
(cold)
I hadn't lost anything.
She lays down the fresh tablecloth. There's something in the boy's manner that gives us the impression that he despises this young waitress and her desire to please.
SUE
You wouldn't guess what I found here only ten minutes ago. When I changed the cloth.
ALEX
You always change the cloth?
SUE
Oh no.... it seems that way doesn't it. But only when a customer upsets his drink, and today when I changed it, there was one 'em Marty Martin's cards, worth fourty dollars.
ALEX
A Marty Martin card?
SUE
Mmm. It was really quite a shock. The others don't like it, they're jealous cause it's like only my second day here. They say I was a fool not to challenge him.
ALEX
You didn't challenge him?
SUE
Because I never thought. He wasn't a bit like the photograph, the one in the Messenger.
ALEX
Maybe the card had been there all the morning.
SUE
Oh no, it couldn't have been that. He was first man at the table.
ALEX
Well, it don't make any odds. You got the card.
SUE
Oh yes, I've got it. Only it don't seem quite fair - you see what I mean - him being so different.
ALEX
You're probably wrong about that. I don't think a respectable newspaper will send someone else, maybe you hadn't looked at him close. Else you'd have known.
SUE
Oh no, that's not it. I always look close, the customer, I mean. You see, I'm new so I get a bit scared. I don't want to do anything to offend. Oh, like sitting here talking when you want a cup of coffee.
ALEX
That's all right. You're the kinda girl I like.. I like a girl who's friendly.
SUE
You're very kind.
ALEX
Some of these here - they freeze you.
SUE
They freeze me.
ALEX
You're sensitive, that's what it is, like me.
SUE
I guess I am.
ALEX
I see you and I got a bit in common. We ought to get together one evening. What's your name?
SUE
Sue.
ALEX
Sue? I like that. Yes.. Sue.
the dialogue on a scale of 1-10. [1= Ed Woods 10= John Steinbeck]
Thank you
INT. CAFE X - DAY
WAITRESS
You gotta problem with something?
ALEX
I want service.
WAITRESS
No. You're late for lunch.
ALEX
Did you hear me say I lunch? I want a cup of coffee, an' maybe a plate of biscuits.
WAITRESS
Will you go to one of the other tables laid for tea, please?
ALEX
No, this table suits me just fine. Thank you.
The waitress walks away, superior and disapproving.
WAITRESS
(to herself)
Suit your self. Bastard.
ALEX
Well?
WAITRESS
The waitress serving your table will be here in a minute.
Again he inserts his hand under the tablecloth. Nothing. The card is gone!
SUE (O.S.)
Was it coffee you wanted, sir?
ALEX
I gave the order once.
SUE
I'm really sorry. There's been such a rush today. And it's my first day, an' I'm still learning the robes, so if you just bare with me. Have you lost something?
He withdrew his hand, watching her with dangerous and unsympathetic eyes. His cheek twitches from nerves.
SUE (CONT'D)
I'll have to change the cloth again for tea, so if you've lost something...
And like that, she clears the table of it's accessories, then nips together the corners of the tablecloth and lifts it in one movement from the table, crumbs and all.
SUE (CONT'D)
... there's nothing there, sir.
ALEX
(cold)
I hadn't lost anything.
She lays down the fresh tablecloth. There's something in the boy's manner that gives us the impression that he despises this young waitress and her desire to please.
SUE
You wouldn't guess what I found here only ten minutes ago. When I changed the cloth.
ALEX
You always change the cloth?
SUE
Oh no.... it seems that way doesn't it. But only when a customer upsets his drink, and today when I changed it, there was one 'em Marty Martin's cards, worth fourty dollars.
ALEX
A Marty Martin card?
SUE
Mmm. It was really quite a shock. The others don't like it, they're jealous cause it's like only my second day here. They say I was a fool not to challenge him.
ALEX
You didn't challenge him?
SUE
Because I never thought. He wasn't a bit like the photograph, the one in the Messenger.
ALEX
Maybe the card had been there all the morning.
SUE
Oh no, it couldn't have been that. He was first man at the table.
ALEX
Well, it don't make any odds. You got the card.
SUE
Oh yes, I've got it. Only it don't seem quite fair - you see what I mean - him being so different.
ALEX
You're probably wrong about that. I don't think a respectable newspaper will send someone else, maybe you hadn't looked at him close. Else you'd have known.
SUE
Oh no, that's not it. I always look close, the customer, I mean. You see, I'm new so I get a bit scared. I don't want to do anything to offend. Oh, like sitting here talking when you want a cup of coffee.
ALEX
That's all right. You're the kinda girl I like.. I like a girl who's friendly.
SUE
You're very kind.
ALEX
Some of these here - they freeze you.
SUE
They freeze me.
ALEX
You're sensitive, that's what it is, like me.
SUE
I guess I am.
ALEX
I see you and I got a bit in common. We ought to get together one evening. What's your name?
SUE
Sue.
ALEX
Sue? I like that. Yes.. Sue.
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