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    I have a question about introducing characters.

    If our first introduction of two characters is done with dialogue O.S., for example in the dark, or overhearing them inside a car or the other side of a cliff, should you call them CHILD VOICE and FEMALE VOICE, or go ahead and use their names?

    For example:

    A ferry boat sails away from the harbor.
    FEMALE CHILD's VOICE (O.S.)
    Will he forget me?
    WOMAN's VOICE (O.S.)
    Never

    Any thoughts?

  • #2
    voices in the dark

    Do you want the reader to know right off the bat?

    Is the character who is hearing these voices supposed to know the idenity or is this "mystery"?

    mj

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    • #3
      Re: voices in the dark

      If you're going to just go ahead and show them a second later, it'd be easier to simply use their names. If it's going to be a while, I'd say it's okay to go the other route, but so far as the child's voice goes, let us know if it's a little boy's or little girl's voice.

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      • #4
        Re: voices in the dark

        Its no mystery and I will be introducing the characters in the next few seconds. I was just concerned about proper form. Thanks for the responses.

        I may just use:

        A small tent sits alone in the Bailey backyard.

        ZUZU (O.S.)
        (a 4 yr old girl's voice from inside tent)
        Every time a bell rings...

        MARY (O.S.)
        (a woman's voice from inside tent)
        We know. Go to bed.

        or perhaps:

        A Small tent sits alone in the Bailey backyard. The voice of a 4 year old girl is heard from inside the tent...

        ZUZU (O.S.)
        Every time a bell rings...

        .... followed by the voice of a woman, also from inside the tent...

        MARY (O.S.)
        We Know. Go to bed.

        Any thoughts?

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        • #5
          Re: voices in the dark

          For readablilty I like the second of your examples:
          A Small tent sits alone in the Bailey backyard. The voice of a 4 year old girl is heard from inside the tent...

          ZUZU (O.S.)
          Every time a bell rings...

          .... followed by the voice of a woman, also from inside the tent...

          MARY (O.S.)
          We Know. Go to bed.
          I think putting the description in parentheticals seems visually cumbersome and incorrect format.

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          • #6
            Sperry,

            Write the script the way the viewer will see the movie.

            AG
            Seattle

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