From his The Social Network;
MARK ZUCKERBERG is a sweet looking is a sweet looking 19 year old whose lack of any physically intimidating attributes masks a very complicated and dangerous anger. He has trouble making eye contact and sometimes it's hard to tell if he's talking to you or to himself.
ERIKA, also 19, is Mark's date. She has a girl-next-door face that makes it easy to fall for. At this point in the conversation she already knows that she'd rather not be there and her politeness is about to be tested.
Pretend that it was one of us who wrote this. Would we be criticized for telling and not showing? How is the audience supposed to know that Mark "masks a very complicated and dangerous anger" or that "At this point in the conversation she already knows that she'd rather not be there and her politeness is about to be tested?"
Or is this really OK?
MARK ZUCKERBERG is a sweet looking is a sweet looking 19 year old whose lack of any physically intimidating attributes masks a very complicated and dangerous anger. He has trouble making eye contact and sometimes it's hard to tell if he's talking to you or to himself.
ERIKA, also 19, is Mark's date. She has a girl-next-door face that makes it easy to fall for. At this point in the conversation she already knows that she'd rather not be there and her politeness is about to be tested.
Pretend that it was one of us who wrote this. Would we be criticized for telling and not showing? How is the audience supposed to know that Mark "masks a very complicated and dangerous anger" or that "At this point in the conversation she already knows that she'd rather not be there and her politeness is about to be tested?"
Or is this really OK?
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