It's mine, but I wrote it as a dark drama full of angst. Missed again.
If a woman has to choose between catching a fly ball and saving an infant's life, she will choose to save the infant's life without even considering if there are men on base.
Dave Barry
No, I'm pretty sure that was mine. All my scripts have brilliant writing, a great story with wonderful levity, and, no question about it, are often absolutely hilarious at just the right moments. Every single one of my scripts. Even the bad ones.
"The pace is brisk, the visuals are solid and the action is well described. There are plenty of interesting twists here, and the writer cleverly manages to keep us surprised right up to the final reveal."
Def not me here... no twists in my script
BTW, the title was supposed to say "Reader LINE of the Day"
Poorly written, weak craft, no structure, barely a story, the story doesn't kick in until page 65, overwritten description, should be forty pages shorter, clumsy dialogue, no conflict, this writer has no clue, et cetera.
In past years I used to assemble critical reactions from the comments on only the semifinalist and finalist scripts. I think "not enough conflict" and structure problems of various sorts often topped the list of negative reactions.
Poorly written, weak craft, no structure, barely a story, the story doesn't kick in until page 65, overwritten description, should be forty pages shorter, clumsy dialogue, no conflict, this writer has no clue, et cetera.
I was a bit worried for minute, but then remembered that in all my scripts, the story kicks in by page 50.
Poorly written, weak craft, no structure, barely a story, the story doesn't kick in until page 65, overwritten description, should be forty pages shorter, clumsy dialogue, no conflict, this writer has no clue, et cetera.
love the new feature, Greg -- but maybe it would be helpful to see the critical, as well... to learn what not to do, and common mistakes writers make... It may even more instructive than the positive comments.
i think the "reader LINE of the day" should have it's own section. i don't want to sift through all those lame posts to find some obscure comment. the hunt turned me off. and if that "LINE" had some kind of hint as to which script it was people would be checking in on the regular waiting to see if their story get 15 minutes of fame.
I think there's worth in the negative comments, as long as they are constructive. It reminds people what they need to pay attention to. That said, it's about as useful as the postive comments, but I do enjoy reading those comments about my script that was entered
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