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    S T A R L E T T E

    Written by: Angelia M. Pitts
    Registration #WG1073397

    As high school senior Holly Parker, a tall, honey
    blonde, with bright green eyes and a high wattage
    smile, stood center stage for her fourth curtain call,
    she basked in the standing ovation and the roaring
    applause. She decided, at that moment "This is it,
    this is what I was meant to do with my life." She
    would become an actress, the greatest the world would
    ever know.

    Two weeks after graduation, armed with great ambition,
    two suitcases filled to capacity and five thousand
    dollars, a graduation gift from her parents, Holly was
    on a plane headed to Hollywood. During the plane
    ride, she fantasized that as soon as her feet hit the
    tarp, they would all come running because, of course,
    they had all been waiting, with bated breadth for her
    arrival.

    However, reality set in like a hard right hook across
    her pretty face, when the plane landed and she
    discovered that she was just another struggling fish
    in a sea of wannabes.

    So, She made the rounds, casting calls, casting
    couches, itty parts, partial nudity, B, C, D, E and F
    movies, feminine product commercials, "Do you ever
    just not feel fresh?"

    Five years later. By now, she was a lot more jaded
    but was still holding on to the hope that "that" role,
    the one that would shoot her to stardom on a rocket,
    was just around the corner.

    And then, an invitation to a party at a major
    director's house via a friend of a friend of a friend
    who knew somebody. "Do you wanna?" "Of course I do."
    And so she went.

    Holly "borrowed" a designer dress from the wardrobe
    department of a movie where she had only had a small
    part. "Hopefully, they won't notice that it's gone
    for the night." She said through a misleading sexy
    smile to the security guard who had a crush on her so
    he helped her sneak the dress out.

    That night at the party, everyone who was ever anyone
    was there and she worked the room with a fierce
    determination inspired by her ambition, the negative
    balance in her checking account and a looming rent
    payment. She reasoned that if success in Hollywood
    depended more on who you know than what you know then
    she was going to know everyone and everyone was going
    to know her before the end of the night.

    Then, three glasses of champagne later, nature was
    calling. She tried to let it ring, not wanting to
    miss one single opportunity to schmooze but before
    long she found herself doing the pee pee dance down a
    hallway in search of a facility.

    She opened door number one, a den "That's not it."
    She opened door number two, a kids bedroom "That's not
    it." She opened door number three, the master bedroom.
    "That's not it." But what she saw put mother nature
    on hold.

    There he was, Chance Logan, taller, darker and even
    more ridiculously handsome in person than he appeared
    on the big screen. There he was, the biggest, highest
    paid, most handsome actor in Hollywood making love on
    a king-sized bed with the most beautiful...man she had
    ever seen in her life.

    Holly stood there, unable to move her body from that
    spot or her eyes from his eyes. He calmly got up,
    draped a robe around himself, walked over to her,
    looked her in her eyes and asked "What's your name?"
    After taking a moment to snap out of the daze she has
    fallen into, she managed to mutter, "Holly, Holly
    Parker." He examined her from head to toe then asked
    â€Who are you?†Dumfounded she replied, â€Nobody, just
    an actress. Or at least, a wannabe actress.†Then
    with a calm flash of his two million watt smile, he
    replied, "Well Holly, Holly Parker, you are about to
    be Hollywood's next big thing."

    Act One. Two weeks later, Holly Parker found herself
    arm-in-arm with Chance Logan walking a red carpet at a
    Hollywood premier as paparazzi scrambled for pictures
    of her and everybody whispered and wondered "Who is
    she?" and "Where did she came from?"

    "Yes she's an actress." Chance would stop and proudly
    announce to the pretty entertainment reporter who had
    shoved a microphone in his face "But she's more than
    that, she's the love of my life and we are deeply,
    madly and truly in love. She is the light of my life
    and the air that I breathe. She is the one I've been
    waiting for my whole life"

    Act Two. Soon, their faces where everywhere, on
    everything and they were interviewed by everyone.
    They cuddled, they kissed, not a photo-op did they
    miss.

    And soon, Holly's manager's phone was ringing off the
    hook, the offers were flooding in and she was
    accepting all of them. She was the 'IT' girl and
    everybody wanted a piece of her. While she was
    playing "that" part the one that was shooting her to
    stardom on a rocket before an unsuspecting crowd.

    Act Three. Soon, the "couple" citing became fewer and
    farther in between. And whenever either was asked of
    the other's whereabouts the response from both was a
    well rehearsed, heartfelt "Oh they couldn't be here,
    they're working."

    And soon the speculations, followed by the subsequent
    headlines "Is America's favorite couple in trouble?"
    splashed across the tabloids.

    All the while, Holly's star kept rising and rising and
    rising. And then came the role, the one that would
    carve her stardom in stone. And then the rave
    reviews, the Oscar buzz and the nomination.

    And then, the announcement that would shake the
    entertainment world "It's Over." In separate
    interviews through sad expressions they each recited
    the ever popular "It was a mutual decision." "We're
    both just so busy right now." â€Conflicting schedules.â€
    "We'll always love each other." "We'll always be
    friends."

    Three months later, as Holly Parker stood on stage
    clutching the Oscar she had won for â€that†role that
    had carved her stardom in stone, she reflected on the
    real role that had won her this Oscar.

    The end.

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  • #2
    Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

    Sure, but how are you gonna convince Tom Cruise to play Chance Logan?

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    • #3
      Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

      You got moxie, kid...













      I hate moxie.
      "Boobsie is Tassle. Exotic dancer, exotic private investigator. Icy Stoli cranberry gives her the superhuman ability to project her voice to deadly decibel levels." -- StrayGatsby

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      • #4
        Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

        Lou Grant to MTM, right?

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        • #5
          Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

          LOL @ Boobsie.
          Fortune favors the bold - Virgil

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          • #6
            Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

            To answer the question?

            No. It wouldn't.

            Almost invariably, MOW's are (if they're network) about disasters or (if they're Lifetime/Oxygen) about women screwed by really creepy men or (if they're on Sci/Fi) about the worst sfx you can buy for under 10K.

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            • #7
              Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

              Originally posted by Writer1
              Sure, but how are you gonna convince Tom Cruise to play Chance Logan?
              Ah come on now (she said, dripping with sarcasm) what makes you think this is about Tom Cruise?

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              • #8
                Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

                Thank you for your honesty; however that question was posed with tongue firmly in cheek...I realize what makes a good MOW...reliving natuaral disasters, family murders, psycho men trying to get over on weak women until the women have a sudden burst of strength and kill the men...My story does not fall into any of those cookie cutter molds...I guess I long for the old days of t.v. when a writer could get work based more on the creativity of his mind and less on the retelling of some natural disaster or horrendous murder committed by the boy or girl next door or some celebrity who is in the process of going to or get out of jail, that has already been played on the news five million times...what more is there to tell?

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                • #9
                  Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

                  TV is called formulaic for a reason. Stick to the formula, or find someone whos formula matches your story. There's really no other option. In all honesty, there never was another.

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                  • #10
                    Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

                    I guess I long for the old days of t.v. when a writer could get work based more on the creativity of his mind ...
                    Ignoring the sexist bias in the phrase 'his mind', what makes you look at that story and feel that it is particularly creative?

                    A girl dreams of being an actress. She struggles for years, before finding success. Even then, though, she doesn't find success because she is talented, but because someone walks up to her and announces that HE is going to make her a star.

                    Surely this is an INCREDIBLY passive hero?

                    And worst still - her all consuming driving force has been resolved - at the start of Act I !

                    I just learned last week that the current hip phrase for writing is 'story engine'. And now I get to use it.

                    What is your story engine ?

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                    • #11
                      Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

                      I long for the old days of TV when a writer could get work writing lines like this...

                      Originally posted by angelface
                      However, reality set in like a hard right hook across
                      her pretty face, when the plane landed and she
                      discovered that she was just another struggling fish
                      in a sea of wannabes.
                      lefty

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                      • #12
                        Re: Wouldn't this make a great MOW?

                        Originally posted by left field
                        I long for the old days of TV when a writer could get work writing lines like this...
                        Originally Posted by angelface
                        However, reality set in like a hard right hook across
                        her pretty face, when the plane landed and she
                        discovered that she was just another struggling fish
                        in a sea of wannabes.

                        lefty
                        Ooo - how did I miss that one on the first read?

                        "Would you like a metaphor with your simile?" asked the McScript cashier.

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